Subject: Oh dear, poor Momoka, a solo mission would not be fun.
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Posted on: 2024-04-12 20:53:33 UTC

I really appreciated the boys' dialogue, seeing how much Momoka holds the group together was amusing. I wonder if they'll end up being pursued by Medical staff....

Just one small typo (I think):

"Then a scream comes from a house, followed by a horrific sight where a women comes out with blood in her hands, carrying her small child, knocking Momoka flat on her behind."

I'm not sure if you meant to point out the fic's "women" instead of "woman" or not, but I don't think you need that "a".

--Ls

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