re: mission part 1 by
doctorlit
on 2024-04-13 13:28:22 UTC
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Ha! I love that the three men’s troubles have all caught up with them at once. And it was perfect timing to drop Momoka on a solo mission right after the embarrassment bomb that got dropped on her at the end of the pervious one! But she’s putting too much blame on herself; “it takes two to tango,” so Kaguya is equally at fault. But as usual, she’s only thinking about Kaguya and not herself, and has put herself in danger on a solo mission as a result. I know Kaguya is sick, but I don’t blame him for being worried, and wanting to help her!
I also really liked Inasuke’s little speech about Momoka. I had assumed he had a crush on her, like Urato did here, but I see it’s more an expression of gratitude for his rescue, and his recognition that Momoka makes for a much healthier friendship than he had had with Bakara. It’s very sweet! Although I was also amused by the speech putting Urato to sleep halfway through . . .
—doctorlit throws vitamin C at the boys
Oh dear, poor Momoka, a solo mission would not be fun. by
Linstar
on 2024-04-12 20:53:33 UTC
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I really appreciated the boys' dialogue, seeing how much Momoka holds the group together was amusing. I wonder if they'll end up being pursued by Medical staff....
Just one small typo (I think):
"Then a scream comes from a house, followed by a horrific sight where a women comes out with blood in her hands, carrying her small child, knocking Momoka flat on her behind."
I'm not sure if you meant to point out the fic's "women" instead of "woman" or not, but I don't think you need that "a".
--Ls