Subject: Chapter 2 is now edited.
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Posted on: 2015-01-20 15:15:00 UTC
Tawaki, Lily, Karen, Dawn, I have specific comments directed at the four of you (mostly lines for your approval, which I've had to add to make scenes flow). hermione of vulcan, I don't think there's anything specifically about Gloria, but please come and make sure I haven't messed anything up.
hS
Is it still on? I seem to be the only person working on it lately.
Tawaki, Lily, Karen, Dawn, I have specific comments directed at the four of you (mostly lines for your approval, which I've had to add to make scenes flow). hermione of vulcan, I don't think there's anything specifically about Gloria, but please come and make sure I haven't messed anything up.
hS
Actually I barely ended up changing anything in 3, so that's good. ^_^
hS
I've come to the conclusion that the Adam-12 scene would work better in the next lesson.
I've had to add a fairly long exchange to preserve narrative flow in the middle, and there's a couple of lines with no speaker assigned; if someone can pin a name on them, it'd be great.
For Adam-12 (I don't know what that is, but I know the scene ^_^), I'm thinking we should make a 'between videos' chapter out of it and my Detritus scene; sort of a bonus extra scene. That keeps them out of the main narrative (which should after all be all about Rory and her mess), but lets them get a decent scene in. Then they can be referenced in the main stories.
hS
Just briefly popping in to offer apologies and say that I'm still around--just getting through busy-with-school times, and waiting for a clear stretch to become a returnbie (can't wait, it looks fun). I'll get on answering comments and so on sometime after this week.
Toss in jetlag and so on, and you've got my January. Hurrah!
(I'm not making too much sense, am I? Oh well. I must away to science at any rate, so I'll do that now, but I'll hopefully be around again sometime, er, next week? Maybe?)
But yeah. Haven't completely vanished, just gone a little away. But (dramatic voice) I'LL BE BACK!
~DF
I did a full edit-run over Chapter 1, but stopped to let DawnFire sort out the punctuation across the whole thing. I don't know if that ever happened... I'll take a look.
No, it looks like not. Okay, I'm going through and doing that, then.
Current Status
Chapter 1 is COMPLETE as far as I'm concerned. Everyone involved should go look at it, and comment if they think anything needs changing. Don't go adding things in - it's just going to confuse us all (more than we already are ^_~).
Chapter 2 is the one I'm currently poking at. What I'm doing is standardising the punctuation, and editing for consistency. Jokes which have lost their references through too many interjections will be tweaked, and narrative passages which don't need to be there, or are too long, will be removed. Anything more complex than that, I'll comment rather than adding/deleting.
Once I've finished #2, I'll move onto #3, and so on and so on. Though no promises as to when...
hS