Subject: Oh, most excellent!
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Posted on: 2015-01-16 02:04:00 UTC

I very much enjoyed this, especially the Fisherman having to fight off the Suefluence. Shame it didn't quite work out.

Just one tiny nitpick: As an agent of the Protectors of the Plot Continuum, you are hereby charged with

I think it would be a bit clearer if you said "As an agent of the Protectors of the Plot Continuum, I hereby charge you with". The way it is now makes it sound like not!Elsa is an agent. ;)

Other than that, well done, and the Medical report also got a giggle out of me.

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