Subject: Unfortunately not.
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Posted on: 2014-10-29 15:15:00 UTC
My only real contact with it has been reading LQ's rants - not her actual stories, you understand, but her rants. They're fun.
hS
Subject: Unfortunately not.
Author:
Posted on: 2014-10-29 15:15:00 UTC
My only real contact with it has been reading LQ's rants - not her actual stories, you understand, but her rants. They're fun.
hS
First up, and unfortunately about a day too late for the person who requested it to actually see it:
PPC: Driftwood - Opposite Reaction Same Result
In which moral quandaries surrounding the treatment of eleven-year-old girls are resolved. Set in The Parent Trap (1998 film).
Secondly, since it's become relevant, I've completely rewritten Dafydd and Selene's Interlude 1. Bear in mind this takes place before Selene admits to being a vampire, and before Dafydd admits to being an elf. The original is linked at the end if you want to see the differences.
Thirdly and finally: the next Driftwood mission is already in the works, but I'll take requests for the one after that if you've got them, on a 'first come, only served' basis. Less than 6000 words, rated T or lower, and with some notes on why you think it's bad, please! The Intelligence Report format below can be used, but doesn't have to be.
hS
Both of them.
All in all, an excellent mission! I loved the unorthodox exorcism, and the confrontation between Kaitlyn and Selene was very well-written. It's probably a good thing Selene didn't nom any bits- there might be traces of glitter in them. You never know.
The exorcism was mostly unorthodox because I didn't feel like clubbing preteen girls with DVD cases was a good idea ^_~. Glad you liked it!
Glitter... hrm. Would bit parts actually have glitter in their blood? I suppose at least one counsellor is mentioned in the fic, but Kaitlyn stole her role. That means that in theory, they should just be the canon characters. But on the other hand, they're sitting by and letting their boss do something frankly insane, so maybe they're OOC even while off-screen...
hS
I liked the way you handled that mission. The mirror idea was excellent. It was a creative and different way of handling an exorcism for characters who weren't quite . . . traditionally? Out of character. It was also nice to read a mission where the main problem was just faulty characterization on a fairly mundane level, rather than some big, magical, universe-ending thing.
Also, I like the scenes with Selene's hunger getting stronger. You wrote her in a way that made me sorry and sympathetic for her, even though what she was wanting to do was, at face value, awful. But I also appreciate that you had Agent Kaitlyn call her on it, then offer to help enact a solution.
I've been looking real hard for a Dark Tower badfic to offer up. But . . . Stephen King fans are just too high-caliber; I can never find any bad ones. I found a cute little goodfic, though, so have that!
I'm glad the Selene thing worked out; it was actually going to be in the last mission, but that of course got taken over by wolves... anyway, it stalled out the writing for a little while until I got it sorted, so I'm glad it worked.
And that goodfic - very nice! Thank you!
hS
Are you familiar with The Legend of Zelda? Cause I found a fic that's setting off all kinds of alarm bells.
Fic: The Mysteries of Hyrule (https://m.fanfiction.net/s/10720410/1/The-Mysteries-of-Hyrule)
Continua: Legend of Zelda (Toon Link timeline except Phantom Hourglass, Ocarina of Time, Four Swords, Skyward Sword, and Hyrule Warriors. Not kidding.)
Description: As far as I can tell, the author's/submitted OCs run around in time-squiggled Hyrule and aid/replace various versions of Link.
Type of Badfic: Mary Sue/Improbable AU
Plot holes/biggest offenses: Besides the mentioned time-squiggle, there's a fairy created by Hylia herself (the creator goddess) to aid the main Sue--who explicitly says that only Kokiri get fairies, mind you--characters are shoved in willy-nilly, and...just, bleh. If you won't kill it, I will after I get permission.
My only real contact with it has been reading LQ's rants - not her actual stories, you understand, but her rants. They're fun.
hS