There’s one typo causing an unintentional tense shift: Leyuu ruffles Iris’ hair.

And in the mission, the word existence has been duplicated.

HG

That was a funny TYH. Only one tiny nitpick: from the opening scene, I thought that the Carmines' home was not in PPC HQ. But like I said, that was just a minor nitpick.

One question: When did Lapis pick up the name "Armenus"? Memory serving, she was always just "Lapis Lazuli".

Interesting mission, and a creative assassination of the Sue. The random Japanese words did throw me off a bit; having to look up an unfamiliar term mid-mission can detract from the flow of a story.

I only caught one error:
Cupid gulped. “Uh… A friend of ours’,” he replied.
Remove that apostrophe after "ours".

One more thing: Out of curiosity, why is Steph an Assassin when she is so squeamish about killing?

(Firstly, to avoid confusion, I checked my mail first and replied to your message there, before going to the Board and reading this post.)

Look, I'm perfectly fine with you going ahead and posting the mission if you feel that it has gotten all the betaing it needs.

I'm not fine with the way you described my role or lack of such. I got the link on Wednesday and now it's early Friday (where I am anyway). You didn't say, not when you asked for a beta nor when you sent me the link, that you were planning to post the interlude less than two days after, so I assumed I could look it over Friday evening or in the weekend.

I had a vet emergency and haven't really checked my mail for a couple of days, but that's obviously not something I knew in advance and anyway, I don't think that counts as disappearing from the internet.

So yeah, I don't want to be a b**** about this, but I feel like I'm being accused of ghosting you, because I missed a very short deadline you hadn't even told me about.