Subject: Okay, that's it...
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Posted on: 2016-05-18 08:06:00 UTC
It happened to me twice now, so I have no other choice, but to bring this up here:
Why wasn't I informed that you were going to publish the mission? I didn't tell you I was done with my work.
Mind if I redirect you [HERE]?
Miguel and Violet visit a certain swimming anime, with surprisingly low-key results. Thanks to my beta readers for advice on making it more readable. :)
Ironically enough though you pointed out a few of the not-so-badfic's punctuation errors, you made one of your own:
He wrote down a charge for glomping Haruka
You missed a period.
One more issue:
Miguel attached the Iwatobi-chan to the side of his backpack; no one in canon would bat an eye, and it might even stay attached when he dropped his disguise.
Since the next two clauses are explaining Miguel's action in the first clause, the semicolon should be a colon instead, signaling that an explanation was coming.
It happened to me twice now, so I have no other choice, but to bring this up here:
Why wasn't I informed that you were going to publish the mission? I didn't tell you I was done with my work.
Mind if I redirect you [HERE]?
Dang it, and I promised not to jump the gun this time. :( Sorry, Matt!
I did not realize that Matt hadn't finished beta reading, and I should'be said for her to post once her other beta was done. I'll have to remember that next time!