IÂ’m confused. by
Hieronymus Graubart
on 2016-01-07 19:57:00 UTC
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This shouldn’t be surprising, because I don’t know anything about RWBY. Astonishingly enough, I could follow the events quite well, until this happened:
The Aviator waited while Zeb opened a portal and disappeared through it, pulling a DVD copy of volume one out of her pockets.
Was Zeb suddenly genderbent, did he actually pull the DVD out of the Aviator’s pockets, or was this the Aviator pulling the DVD out of her pockets while she waited for something?
Zeb closed the portal behind her and approached the Stu.
So Zeb was genderbent? Silly me! The Aviator pulled the DVD out of her pocket while she waited for Zeb opening the portal and disappearing through it, so that she could follow, and then Zeb closed the portal behind her.
Only at the beginning of the next page I realized that actually the Aviator had disappeared through the portal while pulling out the DVD, and Zeb didn’t pass through a portal before he approached the Stu. Putting a comma between "Zeb opened a portal" and "and disappeared through it" might have spared me a lot of trouble, although the sentence still looks a bit weird.
Fun mission. I liked it.
HG
Yaaay! \o/ by
S.M.F.
on 2016-01-07 16:24:00 UTC
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Also: Do I sense some Sofia The First missions in the future? ;)
Yay, new mission! by
eatpraylove
on 2016-01-07 16:10:00 UTC
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I liked the joke about the Wassailia candles and the Festivus pole. I don't remember what the Feats of Strength are, exactly, but I bet seeing Zeb try to complete them would be hilarious anyway. :)
I guess it was only a matter of time till RWBY got a straight-up bad anime OC, given how anime-like it already is. Has somebody written a story about where Ren came from? I know Jaune's from another part of Remnant, but I think Ren's from the equivalent of China as well...? Gosh, I need to get back into RWBY.
Just read it. by
Hardric
on 2016-01-07 08:10:00 UTC
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The Suethor couldn't be bothered with following canon even for a line, eh? And he treated Weiss and Yang that way... Would sending him to Death Battle so Yang could destroy him would have been forbidden? Because he so deserved it.
The way you killed is still wonderful. A shame your plan just... fell in the water at the end.