Subject: So, I'm just now reading this...
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Posted on: 2015-12-17 05:32:00 UTC

'Cause it involves FicPsych, and I kinda like to keep an eye on what goes on in FicPsych.

And, I can't help but notice that you seem to have Ami visiting the wrong nurse. You've written a kindly, down-to-earth type person. Loquacious Immac, however, is a bubbly airhead who means well, but is not always 100% up on her situational awareness. FicPsych's Pinkie Pie, if you will.

I'mma take a wild guess at what happened here: You originally wrote the scene for Jennifer Robinson, but somebody pointed out that you'd need my permission to use her, and you didn't want to run the risk of being told no after you'd already finished writing, so instead you ran down the list of Free-to-Use nurses and swapped in Immac's name without stopping to read any of her previous appearances to see what she's like.

I think so because of this line from page 7, which appears to have been missed by the three of you:

Ami pawed at the floor. "Um… I’ll have to pass, thanks. I don’t wanna be late for my session with Nurse Robinson."

How close am I?

~Neshomeh

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