As I told emythos, I'm terribly bad at explaining why I like something, and since I don't know The Mortal Instruments or Elder Scrolls, I may not even have the right words to talk about William and Za'kiir. Anyway, I liked this very much and want to see more of them both.

Now to less pleasant things. You know this always happens when I comment.

“Drinking is normal,” he said, letting his paw move back its original position by his side.
 Missing word "to"?

So, one one hand you want to keep bad memories, and forget them on the other.
Should be "on one".

Also, I'm not sure whether it is possible to see a patch of sky through the open door. I got the impression that Rudi's is somewhere in the endless corridors of PPC HQ, not in the New Caledonian PPC city.

Natalie, who was sitting before the console on a revolving chair, turned at the cautious knocking sound.
Gerrman/Polish habit again? But isn't this Silenthunder's part? My dictionary keeps telling me that "before" relates to time and order of events, while the same German word referring to position relative to an object would be translated to "in front of" or simply "at", although the latter may imply that Natalie is actually doing something at the console rather than just sitting there.

And there are one or two typos in "Sugar Spell":

And even if that is not the same heavenly gift, it it still a good substitute.
Should be "it is".

He would make amends to Natalie as soon as she came back ...
I think this should be "he". As far as I'm aware, Natalie didn't leave and thus won't come back. But Za'kiir left and comes back to her at the end of "Mind Over Matter".
 
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