Congrats! by
Hardric
on 2017-06-16 11:50:00 UTC
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Let me give you this self-updating guidebook of all the deathtraps in the multiverse, and my wishes of best luck for your future missions.
Hat is now on. by
Iximaz
on 2017-06-16 01:22:00 UTC
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SPaG: I noticed a smattering of punctuation errors here and there throughout your prompts, but it's nothing a beta shouldn't be able to catch in the future. (Then again, it's nothing a beta shouldn't have been able to catch here, too...) For the most part, you were fine, but in the future, definitely make sure to do a more thorough check.
Characters: You've certainly got an interesting duo here. Oddly enough, the agent I'm more leery about is Elena; I'm not sure what you plan the nature of her and her Pokémon's glitchiness to be like, and I can't help but look at it as a possible way to circumvent aspects of her home canon in the future. On the other hand, I've seen you RP these characters before, and it seems like the glitches are mostly in the name of humor, so I think I can safely put that worry aside. I, for one, am definitely looking forward to when that egg will hatch and what it'll produce.
I like how self-aware Valka is of her similarities to a Suvian. It's a shame I don't know more of the canon, but from checking the Fire Emblem Wiki it looks like nothing's out of place there. At any rate, it certainly sets the stage for some interesting developments in the future.
I kind of hope to see these two bonding over their origins in video game canons in the future. :)
PPC Knowledge: The only thing I'll really flag is that Luxury, as far as I know, isn't in the business of training new agents, but it's not totally implausible she could have gotten drafted for a day. (Boarders, correct me if I'm wrong, please.) Otherwise it looks fine, and you've demonstrated in RPs and in Board discussions that you know what's what.
Can you be entertaining? I was entertained. Need I say more?
Fic to spork: Oh god, I think you've linked this one in the Discord before. Pardon me while I go find the brain bleach. Yeah, if you can make a funny mission out of this mess, kudos to you.
So it is with great pleasure and pride that, with the powers vested in me by the land of Plort, I dub thee Knight leafeyes! *touches your shoulders with a sword*