Got through the first chapter. by
Bramandin
on 2017-05-24 20:35:00 UTC
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Dahlia is so cute. I had a little bit of trouble figuring out who Miki is.
You do a pretty decent job of describing the two canons for those who don't know.
It's entertaining, especially when they start singing the Lego song.
Sorry, not a good review.
Except, are you aware that Miguel is TimeJumper's IRL friend? https://www.fanfiction.net/r/894267/
Actual comments. by
Zingenmir
on 2017-05-24 07:37:00 UTC
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So this is basically just a series of reactions I had while reading:
I like the interruption of the rap!
...PRUSSIA. You should bring in Prussia to spork. I didn't get that far in the show, but I saw him used for sporking once, and it was amazing.
...oh, good, Prussia is actually in the fic. That would make his potential sporking presence better and, uh, sense-having. Wait, which of the kids is he essentially turning into? He wouldn't make sense with any of them, except maybe a teenaged Marauder or the Weasley twins, but--oh dear. This should be... interesting.
...Malfoy. Prussia is Malfoy. What.
Go Ron go! In fact, please keep talking. For the entire fic. That would be lovely.
...Hungary, dear... Hermione does not like flying.
Yeah, I give up. There's no sense in this fic except for Ron and, sometimes, Ginny. I like "you uncultured ferret" from Ami in the sporking, though.
Ooh, you've brought England in! From the OFU, no less!
Well, that was fun. And 'Monstery Science Theater' was well-placed.
Overall, pretty fun. I'd love to see...well, just about any of the countries come in to spork. Maybe people from HP or unrelated (but similarly themed?) canons, too, if that's an option. Also, might as well third that suggestion of that one country with the polar bear...
Good job!
~Zing
Re: We did a thing! by
Maxewell
on 2017-05-22 03:10:00 UTC
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Without a doubt, that one character whose name I always forget. They live right above America... Anyone know who I'm thinking of? I truly have forgotten.