Subject: Found a badfic.
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Posted on: 2017-03-24 19:34:00 UTC
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12384237/1/Mass-online-eyes-in-the-darkness
*Extreme vagueness, to the point where I can't tell what's going on.
*Bad grammer and run-on sentences.
*Major 40k characters like magnus the red mentioned casually and then forgotten about.
*So vague that you can't tell from the fic that it takes place in warhammer or mass effect, can't tell which universe it is in, can't tell what stuff is being reffered to or even what is going on in the chapter itself.
*Incredibly powerful OC characters created for absulutely no reason other than to be dark, mysterious and to seve as a Deus ex Machina.
Moral: It's often confusing when you try and describe setting0soecific items, places lr people without telling us their name. Yku may think it gives a good effect, but in reality unless done very well it just confuses the reader.