Subject: Thank you! ^_^
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Posted on: 2016-12-28 07:38:00 UTC
(... Star Wars reference... :(...)
Re: the first one - well, bear in mind this was ten years ago, who knows what was going through my mind? But I think Constance was aiming for 'put up or shut up'. Also, he was clearly struggling to find the words to ask her to marry him - she just fed him the line.
But I agree that it's probably the weakest of the five - it struggles too much with needing to infodump LaCE at the lot of you. Bad storycrafting (and it was worse in the original version), but again, it's been a decade...
If you've any suggestions for improving it, I'd be glad to hear them - and given how key a moment it is in their timeline, I might even edit to accommodate them.
hS
PS: Chocolate is either a native product of the Undying Lands, or a Numenorean Exilic discovery from after the changing of the World. But that's cocoa. True chocolate is no older than 150 years, and Dafydd didn't actually encounter it until 1907. His mind was suitably blown, and he developed quite the addiction for about 10 years (until he ran into jewelled chocolate and promptly had some very nasty flashbacks...).
hS