Subject: Nicely written.
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Posted on: 2016-10-26 15:12:00 UTC
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So, not only is Nikki is a Character Replacement of Sakura, she's also from Sergio's badfic of origin? The drama basically writes itself.
One question:
she’s might be the last one to wake up tomorrow…
Is that a typo, or does that reflect a SPaG error in the original Italian?
https://rc1587.wordpress.com/2016/10/22/blank-sprite-mission-record-06/
In which we get to know something more about both Sergio and Nikki, and I even included a translated snippet from an actual scene of Sergio's badfic of origin!
(Also, re-read that section again after finishing the chapter. Not saying more here, it would be spoilers)
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So, not only is Nikki is a Character Replacement of Sakura, she's also from Sergio's badfic of origin? The drama basically writes itself.
One question:
she’s might be the last one to wake up tomorrow…
Is that a typo, or does that reflect a SPaG error in the original Italian?
However, I decided to not correct it as SPaG errors were somewhat frequent in the original - even if that chapter featured none.
While not faithful to the original chapter, i believed leaving the error in was more faithful to the fic as a whole - that particular part was actually of somewhat higher quality compared to the rest. (Especially considering the plot of the scene was still solid enough that I could write a remake of it rather easily - can't say that for 95% of the rest of that fic)
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Yep. Yep she is. Those two scenes, orignal and remake? They feature the very same people six years, a lot of character development and a lot of writing improvement on my part later.
I guess the big fireworks with follow soon, eh? The parallel with the badfic was an interesting thing to do too (And now I'm asking myself how Homura would react if she listened to Connect).
Also, good luck with the sequel of this story and IrregularS. You can never update any of them too often in my opinion.
Silly of me, I know, but it's just gotten slow at work, and I needed something to help pass the time.
I'm happy to say it was quite easy to follow, despite having no idea what else has happened so far. It probably helps that it is (I think) a sort of interlude in the story, with the agents taking some time out of the action to rest and figure some things out. There were some nice character moments for everyone, especially Sergio and Nikki. Actually, the whole thing almost felt like an excerpt from an original story more than a mission. I could visualize everything and sense the bittersweet mood very well. It was a very nice read, and I will have to remember to go back and read the first five chapters sometime. {= )
~Neshomeh