Subject: Excellent- couple of notes.
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Posted on: 2016-10-20 13:48:00 UTC
Overall, I thought it was a fantastic interlude. Elanor's interactions are adorable, and her parents are exactly what one would expect (I'd like to see an AU with her dad as an agent, actually). Zeb being effectively the father figure, even if he is an uncle, is the only smart decision, as magic potions make really terrible paternal figures.
Quick notes I promised-
"He cradled his granddaughter and a kiss on her cheek."
and
"The Aviator took Elanor from her monther, and. . . got her under the Aviator's shirt."
- This is a bit redundant.
Those two bits aside, you have a lovely, hearts-warming interlude.
I expect great things from Elinorelisindrivar. She's certainly got an excellent place to start.