For the first part I said, "The Eye of Argon is unbearable even in this format."

I take it back.

Nitpicks:

Two oddly familiar figures in in an oddly familiar dark room, which is lit up by an oddly familiar small, clunky television.
Repetition.

I don-t know if this-s one of his comedies or a tragedies.
Is this meant to be singular or plural? I guess if it just were the way Finch talks, I should have noticed something similar earlier.

HG

a link to the first part for those of us who were too busy to read it before and are too lazy also busy to look up the link now? *smiles sweetly, bats eyes in winsome manner*

~Neshomeh