I’m still a quite inexperienced fanfic reader and had no idea what writers can get up to, rewriting a chapter but leaving old versions of rewritten paragraphs in and still not caring for anything.

James and Saxo’s mission, though, was a delight to read. To understand their developing relationship better, I even went back and reread their previous mission. This doesn’t happen often, so you can be proud on making me doing that.

Alas, while your betas did a very good job here, I couldn’t avoid noticing some typos in that previous mission:
There is now how and why. (Should be "no".)
James chomped down on his hand and Saxo yanked it back it with a yelp. (Remove second "it".)
Do not get to comfortable, (should be "too").

(And for a brief moment, I wondered whether I should send the Uncanonical Department of Inaccuracies into "Smells of Rose aka. The Enemy of my Enemy". While it is true that Harry’s age is always the number of his Hogwarts year plus ten, eighteen year old students at Hogwarts are not impossible and not even unusual. Since Hermione’s birthday is in September, as mentioned in PoA, she turned seventeen not more than thirty days after the beginning of her sixth Hogwarts year, and was actually eighteen through most of her seventh year. But since the badfic can’t decide in which year it is set and Hermione is not supposed to be at Hogwarts for most of her seventh year – except for the final battle – I guess I can let that slip, pretending that the charge "still going to Hogwarts at the age of 18" is just oddly worded.)

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