Subject: Spotted a mistake.
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Posted on: 2012-11-19 21:01:00 UTC
In the first sentence said by the Hyacinct, you italicized " the Hyacinth projected into Vania’s head" too.
The rest is very good, though. And very funny.
I really liked seeing Ray Bans in the list of "everything that a PPC Agent needs".
My Floaters examine the case of a trans-dimensionally hopping Mary Sue who sends herself back in time. However, the facts don't quite add up to a standard Sue . . .
http://doctorlit.dreamwidth.org/3091.html
The ending of this one is . . . a little different. I'm not sure what people are going to think about it, but I feel that it works well in this mission. Let me know what you think!
Minis will be on the relevant Mini pages on the wiki. The new recruit is available for adoption.
In the first sentence said by the Hyacinct, you italicized " the Hyacinth projected into Vania’s head" too.
The rest is very good, though. And very funny.
I really liked seeing Ray Bans in the list of "everything that a PPC Agent needs".
I'll never get used to using coding. My brain only thinks in words and punctuation. Thank you for pointing out the error!
I'm sure DoSAT is capable of making any sunglasses block the neuralyzer effect, but I felt like making a nod to Men in Black movies.
I like the ending, it's kind of cool to find a mission written with such sympathy; though I imagine there might be problems if certain parties find out that the Agents didn't assassinate the Sue...
Agent Moon would like to welcome Who to the ranks of typo-born Agents. I'd adopt him if I weren't overloaded with Agents already...
The way I looked at this badfic, the actual act of trans-dimsensional haopping, and the anachronisms brought along, were the main source of the canon warping. The Sue, while being an inconsiderate brat, didn't really do much on her own, so assassinating her wasn't strictly necessary to fix canon.
In fact, you could even read the mission to be a Despatch-style one about a badfic author from the Holmes world, writing real person fic about a historical figure. I intentionally left that a bit ambiguous.