Subject: A new spy joins the ranks.
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Posted on: 2016-08-08 14:21:00 UTC

Ava introduces herself well, telling just enough about her world of origin to make me understand how different this is from my home. And then she keeps being strange when she tells the tale of the first badfic she had to inspect.

The badfic’s protagonist is strange, too, but in a quite different way, and that is conveyed to my full content.

There is only one small point of criticism:
Arya mocks Boromir, calling him weak.
In hindsight, obviously not to his face. But this is the point where I got the impression that everybody, or at least Boromir, was aware of her presence. Thus, when Boromir catches the spy off guard, I wondered briefly who this spy might be.

Making Arya (not only her job and the organization she’s a member of) such a big secret that she appears to spy on the Council is the badfic’s fault, but Ava could have made this clearer before she called Arya a spy.

Very well done, Silenthunder.

HG

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