How about this?

The vague 'All' by Miah on 2018-06-25 21:18:00 UTC Reply

All is listed as a vague word on the editing assistant I am using. I have a real problem with vague and weasel words in my writing. Is all just generally bad?

Obviously it is more vague to say, "______ watched as she stripped it of all his lovely potions," than to substitute some random number? Wouldn't that change the meaning of the sentence significantly? Random number of potions doesn't have the same implication of having taken 100% of the potions.

Would it be better to just reword it entirely? How would you handle this sort of problem?

How about this? by Miah on 2018-06-26 06:47:00 UTC Reply

How about this for an improvement?

_______ watched as she stripped it of everything useful for his tradecraft, even finding the secret compartments containing his deadliest poisons.

For bigger context, here it is in the paragraph.

The young woman dressed as if she just left a cloister nodded and retrieved the pack. Zevran watched as she stripped it of everything useful for his tradecraft, even finding the secret compartments containing his deadliest poisons. This sister bore watching. He subtly checked for the things he carried on his person. All gone. His estimation of her changed to artisan.

I'm not quite sure about the sentence you are asking about by RemnantShadow on 2018-06-27 06:06:00 UTC Reply

But the last sentence of that paragraph seems a bit disjointed. The word "estimation" carries a bit of a logistical connotation, and one would use it for things that has a quantity attached to it. What you used it for however is something that has no inherent amount; one can't have varying degrees of artisan, whereas one can have varying degrees of artistic ability. Perhaps a better word might be "impression" or "judgement" instead.

I don't think so. by Snowy the Sane Fangirl on 2018-06-26 05:34:00 UTC Reply

I mean, when you're trying to talk about all of something, you have a few options as far as words to use, but all of them basically serve the same purpose as "all" and would be just as potentially problematic.

A lot of the time (not always, mind) you can just drop the "all" entirely. You could say "she stripped it of his lovely potions" and "all" is, to some degree, implied. However, if you want to emphasize that all of something is involved, then you really have no choice but to use a word like "all" or "every".

Personally, I think that this is just one of those cases where an editing system gets it wrong. They're very useful tools, up to a point, but they have their limits and should always be augmented with a solid understanding of grammar and the meanings and connotations of words. Just the other day, my autocorrect tried to get me to say "the place were the boy stood" instead of "the place where the boy stood". I still use it; it's caught something I missed plenty of times. But I don't accept everything it says as fact.

It's good that you're watching out for these things, but I don't think "all" is a problem word.
Ooh, interesting question. by Neshomeh on 2018-06-25 21:56:00 UTC Reply

I can't say I've heard of "all" being a word to avoid before, but thinking how I'd write the sentence differently, perhaps you can be more descriptive with it. Replace "all his lovely potions" with "every glittering vial and philter" or some such.

IMO, the issue you'd really be fixing isn't with "all," but with "lovely." (I HAVE heard that adverbs are often not your friends.) What's lovely about the potions? Tell us that instead.

But that's just my take on it. {= )

~Neshomeh

You could, but... by Snowy the Sane Fangirl on 2018-06-26 05:28:00 UTC Reply

Wouldn't "every" serve the same function in the sentence as "all" and therefore be just as bad, from a certain point of view? (Personally, I think there's nothing wrong with either.)

I mean, I agree that it's possible and good to be more descriptive than "all his lovely potions". I just don't think that the problem is the word "all", and I don't think it's really possible to improve on that word, or wise to try.

(And "lovely" is an adjective, not an adverb. Not that your point is wrong, just your terminology.)

Well, that's embarrassing. by Neshomeh on 2018-06-26 14:02:00 UTC Reply

Tricksy -ly adjectives...

To clarify, the parenthetical point is in fact about adverbs—it's better to use a strong verb than to tack an adverb onto a weak verb. E.g., "dashed" is preferable to "ran quickly."

Turns out it just didn't apply to this situation. >.>

~Neshomeh