Subject: Well, that's a recipe for discipline...
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Posted on: 2018-04-17 17:40:00 UTC
Having the 'kill the Stu as soon as plausible' mindset bend a little is probably gonna be the goal of this character arc.
Very smooth dialogue play, by the way! When it comes to banter, they seem to be settling into a nice back-and-forth.
Lorson Rho and Dax get their first mission together into Harry Potter and Star Wars. They end up getting along juuust fine.
Or wanting to keep the ever so important advantage of surprise, but the staff of that madhouse can become vicious when it comes to enforcing rules. Head-on confrontation with them is a losing proposition.
You'll be better off playing with them, with classics like 'line up the shot to match the end of the charges list' or 'Charge them while they're dying'. I'm sure a professional like you can think of better ways around that problem. And I'm sure you have the tech savviness to use the rest of our toys to a good use too.
Listen here, I've already heard enough of that 'oh, you should have waited' spiel from him, and I ain't gonna sit here and listen to it from you, too. F--- off.
Getting the first shot like that is the perfect way to go, especially here. I'm just suggesting ways to getting it that the Flowers won't be able to use against you. They can get really vicious if you give them an opportunity to bust your chops (Damn bowler-hat. I didn't chose to land next to your so precious computer).
Dax and Lorson have a funny banter dynamic going, and their clashing personalities (and Lorson's utter newbieness) led to some good lines throughout ("Doctor what" and the Dex score scene are standing out to me right now for some reason).
And then the ending happened, and ... hoo boy, I wonder what Lorson's in for in the inevitable followup interlude. Not gonna be fun.
- Tomash
Dax's character sheet—Dex score and all—are going to be referenced pretty heavily at least a few times. I like to imagine Medical has a copy of his stats as part of his records. No guesses as to where his Charisma score is sitting at... :P
They're definitely going to have to talk some stuff out. Maybe not in an interlude, but in a future mission (after I do another with the Aviator and Zeb, probably).
I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)
Ah, this was a nice, calm mission. A good example of a more experienced character leading a newer one through the ropes, and letting them learn about missions first-hand. I'm amused by Lorson learning to read the Words by adjusting the settings of his prosthetic eye.
And that nice, calm set-up sure gets ended with a bang. I did not see that coming at all. On Lorson's side, it shows both the level of confidence he felt when operating in his previous role as a part of the Star Wars canon, and the fact that those experiences really didn't prepare him for PPC missions at all. On Dax's end, I like that he broke from his usual lighthearted, flirty tone to display to Lorson how serious his actions were. It's fun because it shows that the serious agent of the pair has a careless side, while the easygoing one has a duteous side.
—doctorlit knew nothing about Padmé's family before now
The eye adjustment was actually one of the later additions to the mission! Before I was just going to have Lorson do the usual eyes go out of focus deal, but I like him fiddling with his eye a lot more. If he's ever without it, though, he's prooobably gonna have a hard time. :P
I'm glad the end did what I wanted do, showcasing that there's a bit more dimension to these two than "flirty" and "cranky". Lorson's definitely rather reckless, especially compared to Dax. He's not used to operating by rules like this, and rules are made to be broken anyway, right?
(I knew nothing about Padmé's family before this, too, so yay for Wiki research. Seriously, how do you get the names right but the genders mixed up? I ask you...)
Having the 'kill the Stu as soon as plausible' mindset bend a little is probably gonna be the goal of this character arc.
Very smooth dialogue play, by the way! When it comes to banter, they seem to be settling into a nice back-and-forth.
Lorson's used to a 'shoot first and ask questions later' approach and he's just a wee bit ticked at having to do this silly charge list nonsense. Especially since he's been reassured he won't normally be doing a whole lot of shooting in the first place. :P
And thank you! I originally created these two characters months apart and it was only after playing around with them separately I figured they'd be a lot of fun put together.