Subject: Re: stories
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Posted on: 2018-03-28 04:35:00 UTC

PPC2
I enjoyed reading this, despite not being a Warcraft fan. I liked your agents' personalities: smart and positive, but still capable of descending into sarcasm.

I liked the set-up going into the mission. A fic-in-a-notebook is a new idea, but I like that you portrayed the console as being able to pinpoint the fic's "position" in "space" despite the story not being online. The weaving of the pencil sketches into the physical action is unique and fun, too. And the out-of-order pages affecting the flow of time was hilarious. The Lich king's dramatic return at the end was also cool.

PPC3
Also fun! I like how you use real!Sylendre's presence as a different, more emotional perspective on Azeroth's corruption, in comparison to Mei's more technical fan-based annoyance. (I take it Sylendre is your actual gameplay name/avatar?) I especially liked the quiet moment of dialogue between Sylendre and Erron, where he shares his view on being "fictional." It's a nice, calm moment in the middle of all the hectic madness elsewhere.

I feel really stupid for not figuring out the cause of the rain earlier than I did. At the point when the journal first got wet, I even remember thinking that it was going to come back and affect the story in some way. But you introduced the rain elements so subtly and slowly, I didn't make the connection until the same point when the agents did. And you really put the sogginess to good use as a way to make things difficult for the agents. I especially like that this gave Sylendre, the only one with the capability to solve that problem, to have a moment to shine and fix her home world mostly on her own.

All in all, I think you've got a good grasp on constructing a mission in a funny, entertaining and demonstrative-of-canon way. Well done! I look forward to reading more.

—doctorlit, glad to have another quality spin-off under our roof

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