Subject: Oh, also, writing wise.
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Posted on: 2018-03-23 02:19:00 UTC

SPaG is generally very good, actually. Formatting isn't bad either, though it suffers when it comes to exposition tangents. Or just regular tangents. However, he has a very distinctive (and, eventually, extremely annoying) writing style, exposition *everywhere*, thesaurus abuse, barely shows anything...

As for plot...while he has a surprisingly good grasp on his million and one details (though there are definitely continuity slips in a bunch of places to go along with the times when he put something in twenty chapters earlier only to bring it back), his villains look incompetent and stupid when he claims they're not. What else...He does have some plot points that go nowhere, he--ah. That's the one.

He very, very much plays favorites. His main characters don't have anything bad stick to them. They get miraculous escapes. They get magical improvement upon magical improvement, not to mention stuff upon stuff upon stuff. There's protagonist centered morality, the mains end up looking a good deal more awful than he seems to have intended, and while this is very firmly an AU, his reading comprehension of Rowling's books...doesn't seem to have been the best. This last ranges from small details (apparently forgetting Ted Tonks is not a pureblood) to larger ones (...not even going to start with that).

He also drops in crossovers everywhere, there's a ton of author tract, and he has no sense of moderation. At all. This is apparent in Wonderland scenes, in Harry and company getting more and more and more stuff, in tricking Dumbledore into stupid ideas, in...look, in just about everything. Subtlety, knowing where to stop before something just gets unbelievable or annoying or ridiculous--there's very little sign of it.

This all makes, of course, for a frequently hilarious or just plain *weird* fic, but it's not good writing.

~Z

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