Subject: Much-delayed review (spoilers)
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Posted on: 2018-01-18 18:50:00 UTC

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Reactions while reading:
- I like the rather vague opening
- The bit set on th ship does a good job of giving me the feeling of the place and what it's like there
- "Paint chip in both my eyes." is an excuse I haven't heard before. (and getting called on it made it rather funny)
- Cal and July missing each other is touching
- Guess-the-fic was a nice unusual thing that could happen because of the framing ... and now I want to know about the one with Colonel Sanders
- The Flowers using "not the actual trunk of the matter" and such makes sense and is a nice touch
- The "I want to get paid for this" moment was really funny for some reason
- July has evidently not quite learned to never again volunteer herself
- From what little I know about Power Rangers, they're in teams of six, right? Which is why having four more people makes sense
- I wonder what July got in DoSAT (if anything). If there was something, I suspect it'll be quite plot-relevant later
- Silas is right to be concerned, given how Legendaries go
- At least he was smart enough to stay out of it
- You'd better give Ilraen his partner back in one piece
- Nume hiding in the cafeteria makes sense
- Did the narration just do a doge meme?
- Why's July picking fights in the cafeteria? (or is she?)
- The veteran agents leaving to find better seating makes sense
- Ah, sneaking in during the chaos
- ... trafficking Luxury onto a Navy ship. Heh. If that succeeded, I suspect productivity would grind to a halt within hours. Maybe minutes.
- "Frell U" sounds like a coffee mug Nume would have
- Ok, so the backup is going to DoSAT to get ready to do something
- There's no way that box isn't plot-relevant later
- And I do wonder who the surprise cameos are
- The fic giving off a general sense of wrongness makes sense
- I'm not following the trousers/dress bit too well
- That was a fast CAD melt
- The fic wrapping itself around the canon so tightly you can't see the Words much is something I haven't seen before, and gives a good reason to not actually show us much of it
- "very serious military environment" yeah right
- Riffing the author's note gives me a sense of what's there without showing it and ... did this fic seriously get banned in Australia?
- chuckles at pronouncing the slash in "and/or"
- July, please stop trying to summon the Department of Redundancy Department (although I'm getting the sense they have a standing invitation to said powerpoints)
- "Isn't that piracy?" "Arr" was a good line
- I hope the fic doesn't know the agents are here either, and now hat it got pointed out ...
- Corny jokes are probably a better approach than trying to comprehend the horror of it all
- I wonder if they'll be able to make it to the youth center
- Standard mission-y pointing out bad stuff goes here, without showing much of the fic.
- I'm with July. That Tortura thing is bad and also that was a really freaky scene change
- That narration about the Pink Ranger is pretty creepy
- Well, now that the plan hasn't been spelled out on screen, it'll work ... I hope
- Ok, wait, it is specified. That's a good plan, which will inevitably go horribly wrong now that I, the reader, know what it is.
- Welp. The weird torturer thing was immune to bullets. At least they got through the portal and ... there's still two parts left. Oh dear.
- Ok, so part 3, well, that was a very gripping fight scene so I was too busy reading it to go back and react. The flashbacks worked well. And the Dark Ranger was really creepy. I also liked the "you're a hero" speech the Pink Ranger got near the end
- The departure bits were nice
- The meeting in part four is a nice thing, and I'm liking the details about the minor effects that happened, like Daffyd keeping his Zoid and Trojie stealing a bunch of Disc stuff
- That was a nice twist on July getting paid, and it's a shame she's not getting any medals
- The "moving on" conversation was good
- Heh. Books in the over. Nice call-back to the earlier domesticity conversation.
- It's nice that July and Cal will have some sort of relationship going despite going their own ways
- I wasn't expecting another person on the ship to be ex-PPC. Or for there to be plotholes in the ocean.
- Navigating a ship out of a plothole without anyone noticing does sound tough.
- The various scenarios the ship could've gotten in to were a nice touch.
- Now I do want to know who that navigator is.

General review: I really liked this. One of my favorite parts was how Checkov's gun was loaded a good few times in ways that left me expecting that something would get pulled out later, but without much of an idea of what is was. This made all the appearances (Zoidz, Daffyd, etc.) surprising but in a way that didn't feel like they'd been pulled out of nowhere.

I also think that was a nice, unusual way to take down the fic, and from what I can tell it was canon-appropriate. You had me really worried at the end of part 2 that "no casualties" wouldn't happen (that is, good job building up the tension).

The whole mission also had plenty of silly moments, which is appropriate for the setting.

One complaint is that not much of the mission was spent on actually sporking the fic, but I don't think there were many viable ways to do that with a straight-up piece of torture porn.

- Tomash

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