Nice MST! Gonna read it later! And oh phew! by
twistedwindowpane
on 2017-08-11 18:01:00 UTC
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Yeah, I was wondering if a PPCer could do stuff with their characters before getting permission if the characters aren't agents yet and aren't sporking. I needed the info because I'm in the middle of an over-text RP with an IRL friend in which I play an alternate version one of my pre-agents (and by alternate version I mean a version in which she doesn't even know that the PPC exists), to help me get a good first draft of her personality. A first draft. The RP has become incredibly weird, so I'm pretty sure she won't act as an agent like she does as a weirdly RP'd civilian.
Anyway, I'm bookmarking your MST so I can read it later and laugh with your characters at the badfic. MSTs are one of my favorite things in the world. Hooray!
-Twistey
Re: MST by
doctorlit
on 2017-08-10 01:35:00 UTC
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An imaginary friend character! I'm actually planning to make an entire RC of all the talking animal imaginaries I had as a kid, though it will largely be a background joke, and not a proper spin-off.
. . . Yeah, not much to say content-wise, being an MST. Um, on to the typos I caught?
First, a couple general notes. The titles of canons in your author's note at the beginning should be italicized. (Or in this case, not italicized to set them apart from all the italicized text around them.)
Pauses in writing shown with a line instead of a comma should use a long dash rather than a hyphen:
"'S—okay, I’m out of affectionate nicknames, can we maybe stop this now?' The other girl—her name was Kitty—ran a hand through her messy hair. 'Also, people might be getting the wrong impression.'"
Sadly, U.S. keyboards don't actually have that as a key.
On the Board and other places that use html-based coding, you can make them by filling in the space with & mdash ; but without any spaces. On GDocs and Word docs, you have to go through the Insert --> Symbol rigmarole, or just copy-and-paste them.
Note that you don't need to change the hyphens in adjectival phrases, or other word phrases strung together into a single complex word; you're already using those correctly:
"'. . . while sporking fics that we found bad and-slash-or amusing . . .'"
"'I kinda wish we were Agents,' Kitty said . . ."
No need for that capital "A" there. As far as the PPC goes, "agent" only gets the capital "A" when it's a title in front of an agent's name; otherwise, it's just a common noun.
"'. . . he wasn’t happy the insubordination of his own nose . . .'"
You're missing a preposition between "happy" and "the."
—doctorlit also uses long dashes to sign his name, clearly
Haven't finished it yet, but... by
darklordaakmal
on 2017-08-09 08:20:00 UTC
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Draco is not smooth with the ladies. He is from the lineage of sandpapers, who married into the oldest and noblest families of sharkskin, whose legendary ancestors had been hailed as the best whetstones in the universe, and he had received solid gold medals for the Most Abrasive Stone Polisher of The Year. That is how 'smooth' he is.
I will comment some more later.