Nice sort've, miniread! by
Larfen J. Stocke, esq.
on 2017-08-03 03:06:00 UTC
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I mean, it's not that mini. But I can handle it within a single scroll, so it's a bit mini.
But, ey, I liked it! It's a real cool snippet into that sort of aftermath of those events, and it does a good job, I'd say, of getting that whole feel across. Get a really good sense of all the feelings in it - Alec's own responses to all that horrendous madness and also the sort of, return to the whole place. That whole 'sounds of chaos' bit was great, with that. It's pretty cool, I reckon, just how huge of a change this seems to be for your characters, too. Lots of area for character development and all other sorts of stuff. Nice that it's not just all static, y'know?
And, er, also, hello! You appeared and I didn't say hello because I was being squished by RL at that time.
So, hello! Good day!
Your first thingy you posted was bloody really good and funny, too, and I should probably read more of your other thingies. Unless RL squishes me again, in which case I'll imagine a potential alternate reality in which I'm not being squished and I am reading more of your thingies.
Re: interlude (spoilers) by
doctorlit
on 2017-08-02 21:31:00 UTC
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Poor Alec. I do think taking a nap is the most realistic first response upon getting home. I'm sure that's what I would do. I shudder to imagine the backlog of messages that must be on the console after three years, though . . .
Ah, so that's what he was keeping out of those reports. Sure wasn't expecting that, though that's partly because I wasn't aware he came from a crossover fic. I can't wait to start hearing some of Kitty's side of things; I'm sure her experience in Valcentica was even more wild than Alec's!
I thought for sure the summary was just being metaphorical, so I was surprised by the facial reveal at the end. Were facial marks a thing in Valcentica? I would say, "hopefully, he can get it removed" but I doubt you would have written it there if you intended to remove it . . .
There's one sentence where you've got "Flower" with a lowercase f:
"His console had messages from just about every flower telling him to report in . . ."
—doctorlit, finally caught up on commenting on current stories . . . FOR NOW
I was not expecting this so quickly. by
Zingenmir
on 2017-08-02 15:52:00 UTC
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But it's *here*, and I *love it*. It's so fun to see new things from you about these characters. And I'm excited to see where you take the revision, too.
Also, wow, poor Alec. That Stargate bit is new, isn't it? I remember the pre-revision Team Phoenix as being actual canon characters.
~Z
I liked it. by
Iximaz
on 2017-08-02 15:31:00 UTC
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Not really much else to say. It was short and good, and a nice light read.
I can't imagine waking up with a tattoo on your face is a pleasant experience, though. Time to break out the lasers! ...Unless it's Suvian ink and he can't get rid of it, which seems more likely. I can't help but wonder if it's going to have a bigger significance later on, though.