Subject: It's called "Two Ships." (nm)
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Posted on: 2019-01-07 16:16:00 UTC
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Short Non-PPC Story Plug by
on 2019-01-07 16:15:00 UTC
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Hey! I wrote a thing 'cause I got inspired the other day. It's pretty short (est. 1 page) and I'd really appreciate some feedback/advice. It has some slight language and adult themes but IMO it's pretty tame.
Here it is, as a linkshare, theoretically with commenting permissions: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-8a9abOJFEtS5QAkWpYyH5xN-v1t-oKfcrFJ1AitOYs -
Very nice! by
on 2019-01-08 18:51:00 UTC
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I found myself very interested in the backstory of the main character, especially his relationship with the new Queen. The style is very... well, I only know the word in Hungarian, it means something like 'easy-sounding'. What I'm trying to say is, you have a very natural-sounding writing style. (Artificial or awkward phrasing is one of my pet peeves, and something I try hard to avoid.) I like the end best, though - it made me smile. :)
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Aww, thank you! by
on 2019-01-08 22:48:00 UTC
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That has to be the best compliment I've ever gotten, thanks! I'm glad my writing sounds natural. I've been working on that for a long time. And I'm also really glad you're interested in the backstory of the main character, because that's what my Big Project is! XD Good to know I'm on the right track. Thank you for the review!
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It's called "Two Ships." (nm) by
on 2019-01-07 16:16:00 UTC
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