Subject: Yeah, that went well.
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Posted on: 2018-10-07 15:01:00 UTC
Discovering your abilities is always a good thing :-)
Speaking of my abilities, I spotted an error:
... Gremlin said wearily, as she starting combing blackened corn kernels from out of her hair.
Should be "started".
HG
A crossover years months in the making! An exciting tale of troubles, tribulations, and possibly triumph! Other very dramatic descriptors to generate hype! A thousand elephants!
Seriously though. Like the title says, Nesh and I whipped up a collab interlude. Set in 2015, it features Gall and Gremlin enjoying a little downtime as they watch Aiden for an afternoon. Everything is fine and nothing goes wrong, of course.
Absolutely nothing goes wrong.
As always, comments and thoughts are much appreciated. Enjoy!
PC
Discovering your abilities is always a good thing :-)
Speaking of my abilities, I spotted an error:
... Gremlin said wearily, as she starting combing blackened corn kernels from out of her hair.
Should be "started".
HG
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One overall thing I noticed is that y'all've done a good job keeping folks dialogue distinct (sure, Gremlin and Gall are the most similar, but Gall's a bit more slangy and informal, is the impression I got).
Aiden calling Fellrazer a puppy and asking to pet him was too cute.
His little bout of pyromania might have had me grinning like an idiot. Fire is very shiny. >:D I think Xericka is going to have her hands full raising him.
(And, reading the reference to the movie-which-does-not-exist reminded me: the creators of AtLA are doing a live action series remake, and they said something to the effect of "doing everything right that the movie didn't". So... fingers crossed.)
Huh. I'll keep my eyes open for that.
In the meantime, if you have Netflix, check out The Dragon Prince! It's by the same people, and has a lot of the same charm as A:TLA with fun characters and an interesting new fantasy world. The animation style is a little strange—I think my friend told me it's 2D painting skinned over 3D frames? It's pretty, though a bit jerky. It's a little distracting at first, but I got used to it. Only one season at present, alas. I look forward to the next one.
~Neshomeh
It's definitely on my to-watch list!
Something certainly did go wrong.
"Lord of the Rings" and "colouring book" in the same sentence is something I never expected to see. I definitely like that idea!
Best of luck to the agents in sorting out the RC. Interesting story!
I believe this is the one PC showed me when I had that same reaction. ^_^
Thanks for commenting!
~Neshomeh
Very funny! I could pretty much tell from the lead-up that something was going to happen, but I wasn't expecting it to be so dramatic. I had forgotten Aiden had firebender heritage! I like Aiden's characterization in general, very realistically "little kid"-esque. But his reactions to discovering fire and playing around with it to experiment were superb. I like how Fellrazer goes from seeing Aiden as a source of cuddles to an actual playmate after the firebending begins, too.
I loved Gall's reaction, too. She's so used to brute-forcing her way through problems, but here, she met a situation that couldn't be solved through punching, and I could read in her dialogue and behavior how exhausting the situation became for her.
Too bad Aiden didn't get to see Dumbo, though. He would have liked the scene at the end. With all the fire.
—doctorlit, worrying about the books in RC 555 now
The ones above little-kid's hand's reach, anyway... probably.
Showing another aspect or two to Gall was my goal for this, so I'm glad that comes through. Also Fellrazer being an active participant in events. I'm pretty sure he's upgraded Aiden to "dragon" in his mind. ^_^
Thanks!
~Neshomeh
(Yes, I made that up just now.)
A delightfully domestic read. X)
And that is an impressive maneuver with the DVD. Nice one, Gall!
And then the fire happened. XDDD There will never be a cold night in that RC again! If nights can be said to happen in HQ, anyway.