Subject: Request: two beta reads (MLP movie and Myst novel spoilers)
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Posted on: 2018-08-23 15:04:00 UTC
First, Eedrah writes a letter addressing someone's accusations of cowardly complicity in the dystopian Terahnee system.
Second, a poem from Dinky Hooves' perspective during last year's MLP movie, when the Storm Guards hold Canterlot.
I've been plunking away at my permission prompts and I think they're about as good as I can get them by myself at this point, which means, of course, that it's time to ask for help.
They can be found here, and I've pasted the agent bios into the bottom of the document, in case anyone wants general backgrounds on the characters. Anyone's welcome to have a look! I'll accept any feedback, even if you don't feel up to doing a full review.
(To Tawaki: Sorry for posting on your thread without offering to help. Unfortunately I don't know either of those canons well enough to offer much in the way of comprehensive betaing, though if you want help with grammar and general flow, I'm your girl.)
I have posted comments within it. I do wish I had more actual criticism to give, honestly - you've got really good stuff, here!
I was actually initially planning on giving you permission because I thought that this just, was your permission request, at first. Aaaanyway, know that you're probably pretty close to getting it!
Doing good work, mate!
I'm genuinely excited to see more of these two fellas.