Subject: [[[UNPARSABLE SUBJECT LINE]]]
Author:
Posted on: 2008-08-24 23:48:00 UTC
-
They don't get much Sue-ier than this by
on 2008-08-24 22:36:00 UTC
Reply
Thanks to a poster over on GAFF, I've found the most blatant Mary Sue I've seen in a long time. There's no subtlety there, no attempt at masking her Suefulness, just pure, plain, unadulterated Sue, with an extra helping of attitude on the side.
I don't know FMA well enough to give this the snarking it deserves. I'm sure there are a couple of Agents somewhere who could clean up this Sueage. Oh, how I want to read that one. -
Link? (nm) by
on 2008-08-24 22:49:00 UTC
Reply
- [[[UNPARSABLE SUBJECT LINE]]] by on 2008-08-24 23:48:00 UTC Reply
-
Either the link is broken, or the poster took it down. by
on 2008-08-25 00:00:00 UTC
Reply
(If it was as bad as you say, I hope the latter.)
-
Re: Either the link is broken, or the poster took it down. by
on 2008-08-25 02:29:00 UTC
Reply
Looks like it's missing, all right.
It was that bad. I don't even know much about Full Metal Alchemist, and it was blatantly, obviously, horribly bad. Songfic, too, by the way.
Since I still had it up on my screen, here's the first couple of sentences:
Sophie walked into the office. In her crisp blue uniform with the Uniform Skirt and a pair of blue heels. Sophie Jennifer Witmor. She was a solider and a girl, at only age 17. She was a little to mature for her age, and she hated it. Everyone liked her for her looks, they never let her do anything!
Yeah. And that's just the start. She's a lieutenant, by the way. One who flouts regulations and insults superior officers ... hell, knocks down superior officers ... but seems to avoid the court-martial that should naturally follow. We've got world-class Sueage here ... and she took it down. :( Where's the fun in that? -
XD. Ick. by
on 2008-08-26 01:33:00 UTC
Reply
Although the phrase "a girl, at only age 17" begs interpretation...
-
Of course... by
on 2008-08-25 20:25:00 UTC
Reply
... encouraging bad and inexperienced authors to learn to write and thus, likely, remove their bad writing is part of the PPC's mission...
hS -
Link? (nm) by
on 2008-08-24 22:48:00 UTC
Reply