Subject: Shameless MST plug!
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Posted on: 2012-09-28 10:01:00 UTC
http://rc1587.wordpress.com/2012/09/28/mst-2-part-1/
Where my Agents, two famous (and destructive) Magical Girls, and Kyubey mock a Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha badfic.
Part 2 of it is coming soon. I hope. I'm not that great at respecting schedules...
I was initially going to say there were too many characters MSTing this, but in the end, I think they all had about equal screen time, and I wasn't too confused about who was talking at any one time. You did a good job of giving everyone a distinctive voice, so the dialogue doesn't feel interchangeable. The two voices that felt the most similar were Nanoha's and Homura's, but I suppose they are very similar character archetypes, after all. The fact that I'm completely unfamiliar with both doesn't help me, either.
Also, near the middle, Sergio says, "People doesn’t try to pair up other people," instead of, "People don’t try to pair up other people."
Going to fix that "doesn't" right now.
Homura and Nanoha are similar under some aspects. You DON'T want to be the one who pisses either of the off, for example. Oh, and they're both voiced by Christina Vee in the English dub. (Although I don't like Vee's Nanoha peformance very much. It feels... off. Not Nanoha-like.)
However, they are fairly different characters, but a MST is not a place where the differences shine.
(Nanoha's usually quite cheerful, but you can't be that when you're assisting at the defilement of your characterization)