So I rewrote my Permission Attempt, and while I'm still rather unsatisfied with the bios, I think a beta looking over them is all I need to satisfactorily rework them. I think my writing in general is okay, but I'm still very concerned that my language is awkward and clunky.

In other words, I need a beta.

...okay, I feel like this post should be longer, but there's not really much else to say. So, could you please beta my work?