Subject: Another My Immortal Immitation-ish 'Fic
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Posted on: 2012-09-19 15:53:00 UTC
While cleaning My Immortal's Drinking Game page in TvTropes, I came upon this beauty. Is this worth attention, or is it just another My Immortal knockoff?
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8517460/1/Demons-and-contracts-and-magic-Oh-my
This... thing. This makes no sense. It kills the poor, poor, characters involved--literally, in the case of the Kazumi Magica girls, ALL of whom are dead except for Kazumi, and two/three insane girls: One with a split personality and one who wished to become her dead friend.
And the canons are kidnapped by OCs who name-drop the author. And... Here's an excerpt.
Kyoko was talking about Isabel. She was a which that we finally beat last night. First, it's Izabel, second, finally? Timeline ONE Madoka and Mami beat that thing. Well everyone else (except Hitomi) but me. According to my friends (again except Hitomi) I had no reason to sign Kyubey's contract It's not a contract like that and become a magical girl, Hitomi was blissfully unaware of the existence of magical girls, Incubator's contract, and witches. The rest of us were part of a 6 (formerly 7 but my friend Airi Anri died 4 years ago during walpugisnaught) Walpurgis Nacht. Walpurgisnact. Walpurgis Night. Walpurgis' Night. WPN. There are so many ways to spell this. Also, no, Airi Anri was in Asunaro City, and died by becoming a Witch. That's what made Yuuri make her wish. If Yuuri is in this fic, Airi needs to have become a Witch and been killed by the Pleiades. girl witch hunting team, if you count me because i just tag along Because Homura would let her tag along and be in harm's way. It's not like she spent hundreds of years repeating the same month to save Madoka OH WAIT. and they consider me a member, called magica (A/N: Get it? Of corse you do silly!). THAT ISN"T FUNNY! IT"S NOT CLEVER! IT"S NOT EVEN CAPITALIZED! THAT WORD HAS NO MEANING TO THEM! Incubator always says that i have a lot of raw power but i never believe him. His name is Kyuubey. Why wouldn't you believe him? He doesn't lie.
Someone... help.
I mixed up Airi and Yuuri, but that makes this worse.
Because now, Yuuri, who died in the backstory of Kazumi Magica, by becoming a Witch, is now alive. And now Airi, who wished to become Yuuri, was a teammate of Madoka. And--Yuuri---and---
Oh, and by the way? Luca and Ayase? They're the split personality of one girl. They are perfectly distinct from each other, and viciously hunt down other magical girls so that they can steal their Soul Gems.
http://images.puella-magi.net/9/92/ThePrecious.PNG?20110803020128
Completely. B*tsh*t. Insane.
Never mind. I just meant to italicize my comments, but you can probably tell what mine are.
Because I'm rather certain I have discovered a badfic for the Bad Roleplay Department. At least, the summary claims it's inspired by a roleplay the author is involved in...
"Blue Horizon" by chibinovachan:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8457639/1/Blue-Horizon
M'cheegosa, is a blue dragon born in captivity of human poachers without a flight and without a home. However, fate finds this orphaned whelpling a home with some of the most unique and eccentric dragonkin that the world has to offer. Original concept from an rp with FF user, MermaidAssassin, and others.
I don't like seeing dragons forced to behave stupidly...
...that I think more experienced fans should check on.
"Dark Star"
I'd like some votes on whether to put a Parasol Protectorate fic on the Wiki's surveillance list.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8316352/1/Heartlines
"When Lady Worthington made a deal with B.U.R two years ago she expected to be left alone, but now a new threat to preternaturals forces her to move back to London and confront her worst nightmares. My own characters situated in the world that Gail Carriger so perfectly created set in-between Heartless and Timeless."
It's not bad, but there's something about it that just seems off to me.
(It hasn't been updated for a month, so it may be dying off on its own.)
And that is such a small fandom too. It needs all the help it can get, just a couple of badfics would totally overwhelm it's page at the pit of voles.
Sentences are generally off and too modern for the setting, (that's probably what you think seems off: modern colloquialisms and a lack of pacing,) but I haven't seen much there worse than the fic-thor generally just trying to set up a character that is almost exactly like the main protagonist. It's as if she thinks that female preternaturals are common in this world...
Still, it doesn't seem to be a direct Alexia ripoff and they haven't involved any canons yet from what I saw, so aside from badly chosen phrasing I'd call it a Meh fic for now.
I don't know much about the fandom, so other than the title of this post, I have no other advice to offer.
Sadly, I haven't been able to get past the first page, due to the fact that my reading the words 'von Karma' instantly makes me think of the Ace Attorney games. This is what makes me sure it's a troll.
And when i checked the review, i laughed so hard, though i didn't finish reading this unholy abomination.
Might check it later.
Here's a bag full of capital 'I's. They're patented for use as first-person-singular subject pronouns, but in that role, they're pretty useful.
Please use them. We like good capitalisation here. ;)
hS
Blood Raining Night crosses over LoK, Inuyasha, and Hetalia and I'm really not sure whether it's a trollfic or serious and it's unsettling me. I need another opinion.
I... I think it might be for real. I went and looked at the author's deviantART account, and it's chock-full of terrible MS Paint-esque pictures of the OC. Also some other things, but mostly the OC. Also, the responses to comments about the story... I think it's for real. O.O
I'm disappointed that LoK stands for Legend of Korra and not Legacy of Kain, though. With all the blood-drinkers running around, it would have made slightly more sense. Plus that would've made two fandoms I'm passably familiar with, and I might have claimed it, because my god is there a lot to work with in this thing. Ah well.
~Neshomeh
I'm staring and gasping in horror and laughter (somehow at the same time) at the pictures. Mein eyes... I need Bleeprin.
I considered that, but then I started reading the comments and responses on the main page. They're fairly convincing. I think the author is a little bit clueless when it comes to sarcasm (this is consistent with the tone-deafness of the fic), and doesn't seem to know what a troll is, and definitely has some unusual tastes. But that's all well within the realm of possible for a genuine author. If she's actually Japanese, as she says in her dA profile, that may explain some of the differences in style and taste, too—not enough to excuse the badness, but enough to explain how someone could come up with it at all.
Having read it all the way through now, I'm reconsidering possibly claiming this. Did you notice that Alucard is in it, too? And a couple other fandoms pop up briefly, like Vocaloids. It's verging on mega-crossover territory, and for once it's almost all stuff I know something about. For the things I really don't know, like Hetalia and Vocaloids, I at least have contacts who DO know them well (you being one of them). I can spot enough that's wrong with general Avatarverse concepts to make up for not having seen LoK yet (bloodbending does NOT give you the power to bring people back from the dead), and most of the big problems would still exist even if you swapped out all the continua. Plus it might just put Nume over the edge with all the R-rated stuff, and that would be fun. ^_^
Er, did you want it, though? I should ask that before I go off plotting. >.>;
~Neshomeh
I don't really watch that much anime so yeah. I can give you info on Hetalia and Vocaloids if you want, but you can also ask around; I'm sure there are plenty of other Boarders who know those topics even better than me at this point.
Despite being one of the newer people around, I haven't the foggiest idea what Axis Powers Hetalia is. I mean, I know the general idea (anthropomorphic personifications of various nations used to tell the history of the world... ish) but I don't know what type of medium it is -- is it an animé? A manga? Something else?
And then it got turned into an anime by Studio DEEN.
Hima still does his own thing, and DEEN just romps about adapting whatever they can find, really.
This will be fun.
Oh, and add to the list of fandoms: Princess Mononoke and Elfen Lied. Will have to watch the latter on Netflix, since Lucy is from there and she's important. This blog post tipped me off.
Also, Reicheru's dad is called Goku. That Goku? I'm not sure. Are there other famous Gokus in anime, besides Dragonball Z and the rest? This worries me.
~Neshomeh
I think it probably is meant to be Goku from Dragon Ball, I certainly couldn't think of anyone else with that name (Wikipedia lists a couple of others, but they seem too obscure to consider).
A full description of the character would help identify him, but sadly all I could find in that regard was that he has 'yellow hair and builded body', which I think is supposed to be a reference to Goku in his Super Saiyan state. The other description of him being tall and having spiky hair doesn't really help when trying to narrow down an anime character.
He also flies, which is an ability in that series. It is a bit confusing that his hair is yellow when he's not fighting anybody, though. Maybe he dyed it?
I don't know if the PPCing will even get that far, so it may not be an issue. I suspect the agents will reach the end of their ropes when they learn that the OC literally gives birth to god—though actually, they may have to take her down before that happens. It would go hard for them if Elaine-the-god turned up to defend mommy.
~Neshomeh, plotting away.
You don't even have to read the whole first paragraph to realize it's pretty much an exact copy. There's the same number of names, both with a gratuitous apostrophe, the friend helping with proofreading that gets inserted into the story, even the ridiculously described eyes. It's definitely a knockoff, but that doesn't mean that it doesn't deserve attention.
Another Tara-imiating troll. 'Nuff said.
Something screwed up with the link. Here it is: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5986808/1/xXxChroniclesofLifeDeathxXx
