Subject: Re: mission
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Posted on: 2021-03-01 05:32:19 UTC

Okay, wow, this mission was chaos! I love that you just rolled so hard with this "Bill is on two legs" gag. It really makes the mission something else! You did a great job of using that simple fact to make everything in the canon feel amazingly awkward and surreal. I loved the imagery of Bill just kind of kneeling down and going at the grass, and of Aragorn and Legolas just kind of dumping a "man" into a lake so they can talk. I thought for sure you were going to assassinate him, too, which made his final entrance into the RC even more deliciously off-putting and funny! I love that he still seems completely oblivious to how uncomfortable it is for human characters to look at him.

I think you did well at introducing these new agent characters to us. They both feel like they have very different energies to their mannerisms and dialogue right out the gate, which helps to set them apart in conversation. I like Finn in particular, because she's so energetic, but also seem to know she needs to reign herself in to avoid causing problems, but also also can't avoid causing the problems all the time. I can't wait to see how their interactions and relationship play out in the future, especially in light of their unusual new roommate. Oh, I also like the bit of Headquarters world-building you did with the legend of Finn's exorcism training, and the airhorn punchline it led to.

—doctorlit stayed up late to review this mission, but at least he's off tomorrow

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