Subject: re: We Cannot Be + 20
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Posted on: 2022-06-24 14:56:15 UTC

I love the interactions between Jay and the console in the beginning, both the threat to hold off on the mission actually working, and her fury leading her to punch it after her nap. Although, that means she went back on their deal, doesn't it? Good luck getting it to listen again! I also love her deapna, "My fist is bleeding," in Medical afterwards. Oh, that "rare default: 'Home in on Sue'" is interesting; I usually think of portals as only accepting time and location coordinates, but it seems there are other settings. Too close to a work shift to muddle over that right now, though.

I definitely understand the upset J+A feel here. The weird, Medieval hierarchical society that the badfic author has imposed on Rivnedell and its elves feels very gross. Elves are kind of formal, yeah, but in a casual way, if that makes sense? Like, yeah, they act respectfully to each other, but . . . I guess that's it. Even the leadership is respectful to other elves, none of this ladies-in-waiting and banquets for visiting royalty nonsense. But it also makes me cringe to read Jay wanting to attack the author, and basically condoning torture as punishment. sigh

Minor stuff:
Her hair is amaretto? So she's bald (but sticky) once it dries?
Why name your faithful horse Mallith? Is that even functional in any Elvish language? And Naming an elf Perpetua is just . . . weirdly on-the-nose, and illogical within an actual Elvish society. They're all perpetual!
Anybody know what that "tree-of-life" that gets referenced at Medical is referencing? Tried to search, but it keeps giving me real world radiation poisoning . . .

—doctorlit, cutting the time close this morning

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