Subject: Quite good!
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Posted on: 2022-11-03 21:01:03 UTC
I really liked the dialogue about the gown—I couldn’t help but smile at that. I wonder—did you write the DORKS bit because of our recent discussion about it?
—Ls
In which we leave mecha dogfighting aside to have a couple of more down-to-Earth investigations. Sergio manages to get dragged into a murder mistery by an old friend of his, and then the whole gang gets involved in the mistery of no one being able to die anymore in Venice.
From now on, releases will be on AO3 only as it keeps things easier on my end.
Also up on AO3, in which Constance and Jasmine try to find a quick solution to the end of the world. Spoilers: they don't.
hS
Ooof, low blow with that Suvian comparison, Constance! I totally sympathize with not wanting to wear certain clothing, but at the same time, I suppose the child of PPC agents ought to realize the importance of disguises . . . Hopefully, they'll reach a new time period soon enough, and Jasmine can wear something that she feels more comfortable in!
What a very helpful fellow, this Childermass. '~' At least he at least had a potential lead to send the protagonists towards! I assume that was Childermass, in the first scene, trying to locate Mr. Norrell?
—doctorlit, eating lunch leftovers for dinner
The theme with those is that they each show one character's reactions in the moments after the world changed. Usually it's someone introduced in that chapter, or at the end of the previous one. I may have written myself into a hole with that one; I'm mentally saving up Jasmine for when I don't have any new characters left.
Looking for Norrell is a decent read on what Childermass is up to. He's actually using a trick he employs in the book, which reveals any magic at work. Since the world is changing, there should be massive amounts... but this isn't magic.
hS
I think that was Aziraphale in the second chapter, since Constance and Jasmine find his store later?
—doctorlit had such a busy weekend, he never bothered to turn his computer on, but now he is very far behind on the Board
Aziraphale (spoilers?) is not in the story, but his shop is enough of a character that both the book and show of Good Omens treat its death as a tragic moment. I will admit it probably made spotting the pattern trickier than it needed to be. :D
hS
I really liked the dialogue about the gown—I couldn’t help but smile at that. I wonder—did you write the DORKS bit because of our recent discussion about it?
—Ls
I actually wrote this chapter over a year ago... and then again sometime this spring after the first version got wiped. I wouldn't be surprised if the DORKS line came in after some kind of discussion, though - it's not a piece of kit I normally think about, so something must have brought it to mind.
hS
It was very intriguing—the murder mystery was quite different, and I’m very curious to see how the immortality thing goes.
Oh, and that facepalm picture—just the best!
—Ls