Subject: Review!
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Posted on: 2024-03-13 01:10:32 UTC

Interesting mission. I liked it, there were some great gags (clam hand!) but I felt as though you could have described the settings more. Now for typos!

"He was doing so all by his lonesome."

I think "...all alone." is better.

"Despite this, one need not worry for him; outside of the constant shocks with every pebble, twig and goldfish he picked up, he actually quite enjoyed the peace and quiet."

...goldfish?

"Sorry, Urato-kun," Momoka said. "Speaking of the vacation, where do you think we should go? Do you know any nice destination?"

*destinations

"Perhaps after the mission, she would commit seppuku with her kitchen knife." ...uh... maybe warn for that?

--Ls

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