Well, now! This was unexpected! I saw that simple little drawing, and the creature’s mannerisms while inspecting Kaguya, and was expecting something cutesy, or at worse, some mischievous helper creature, like Kero-chan from Cardcaptor Sakura. I wasn’t mentally prepared for that shriek, or the anger, or the general grouchy personality. You caught me well off-guard! I take it the little guy is an incarnation of the “rabbit in the moon” from Japanese culture? I guess he has a lot to learn about real humans!

In the sentence, “Once the rabbit fell to the floor, he cackled menacingly, his blue eyes started glowing,” you’ll want an “and” in between “he cackled menacingly” and “his blue eyes started glowing,” since they could stand on their own as full sentences: “Once the rabbit fell to the floor, he cackled menacingly, and his blue eyes started glowing.”

—doctorlit is starting with the rabbit in the moon; he’s asking him to change his ways

Okay, that was funny. I love Mr. Usuasagi now.

--Ls