Subject: I liked it.
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Posted on: 2012-05-07 01:39:00 UTC

Especially the "ambulatory pile" and repeated "concussing".

There is one grammar problem:

Skeet was so appalling bad at navigating HQ that he would likely starve before finding it unless someone took pity on him.

Should probably be:
Skeet was so appallingly bad at navigating HQ that he would likely starve before finding it unless someone took pity on him.

Just FYI. Appallingly describes bad which describes how adept Skeet is at navigating HQ.

Otherwise--congrats! And have a bag! It's black. Amelia's first black thing in the PPC.

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