Whenever I see Gaspard's name, I always, always want to say Gaspard de la nuit after the trio of Ravel piano pieces. I'm not sure why myself, but... there we have it.

So... concrit? Well...

This is certainly very different from a standard PPC mission. Of course, it is an intelligence report, so that would call for that situation.

I really like how it read as a journal-type thing of the Intelligence agent's thoughts on the fic as he goes through it. It's especially telling that you get a ton of personality oozing from the pages: you can just tell that the agent doesn't want to be there, and that snarking about it is the only way he can deal with it. I also like that the report reads like the narration of a film noir movie, since there's something dead-pan like about it.

I also like that you listed off things that were wrong with the fic at the end of the report, as well as listing characters off. That made much of it feel like a real report, in addition to being able to really get down and dirty with the fic in question.

If there's one thing I feel was lacking, it's that I felt a major lack of focus on the part of Gaspard himself, as well as the other characters. The brief blurb at the beginning of the report did a good job of establishing the scene, but I would've liked to have them have more of a presence, if not during the report at least during the little introductory thing. I felt like the characters barely had any screen time for us to really get to know them all that well, and I think it made the report too depersonalized. I would've liked to get more of a sense of Gaspard as a person before he enters the fic, and before the report begins.

But other than that, it was a very enjoyable read.