Subject: Possible sporking required?
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Posted on: 2012-03-09 16:53:00 UTC
Hey. This is the very first fanfiction I wrote, and the only one I've ever posted on FF.net.
It's the ONLY Bartimeus Trilogy/Axis Powers Hetalia fanfiction out there. I'm not sure whether this is a good thing or a bad thing.
Can someone read it, and spork it if it requires sporking?
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7276682/1/ThePestilentialSpheres
I'm not familiar with Axis Power Hetalia, but I have read the Bartimeus Trilogy, and I can't actually find anything about this that requires sporking. In fact, it's actually pretty good.
It's possible, however, that somebody familiar with Hetalia will find major problems with it, but I can't actually find anything all that wrong with it.
Kitty's description is pretty Sue-ish- there's not enough time after her introduction to really establish her as a Sue, but the "trendy" descriptor combined with resilience is a warning sign. Still, there's not enough there to really pin anything on her.
But honestly, this isn't anywhere near bad enough to spork. It actually does seem to respect the Bartimeus canon, as far as I can tell. In fact, just judging from what I can see in the three chapters avaliable, I would probably read more of this. It's not super great, but it isn't bad either.
Ohmygosh, you have NO idea how good that makes me feel.
This was the very first fanfic I ever wrote. And I binge-read the Bartimeus books beforehand to make sure I got the flavour right.
^^; I'm aware that this fic has issues, but most of them are more to do with characterization than plot.