Subject: Permission denied.
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Posted on: 2012-02-21 19:56:00 UTC
For a few reasons.
For one, you haven't been around very much; we prefer to know who we're giving Permission to- the PPC is community, and not just about sporking fic. Stick around a few more weeks until you think you know people and you've got the hang of things.
For two, with your writing sample at the bottom, while it is amusing, there is one serious issue with it: punctuation goes inside quotation marks for dialogue. Commas, periods, question marks, the whole rigmarole.
For three: One has likes of 'video games' and 'books'? This is amazingly wide! What sort of books? What sort of video games? And by TV do you mean he likes TVs themselves or TV shows? There is a wide swath of difference between, say, Angry Birds, Halo, the Sims, and Skyrim. And with just books? That's the difference between Left Behind, Anathem, 1632- and that's just fiction! Classical music has many differences as well- are we supposed to be thinking 'gosh, he must be classy and swank' for liking classical music? There are many different kinds of music we think of as 'classical' these days.
Elaboration is sometimes a good thing.
Beyond that, three more minor things.
Who's this Davis mentioned in Avento's section?
Additionally, the PPC is not TvTropes, and using tropes as shortcuts to tell us what a character is like is both limiting on your part, and also can be really messy and sloppy shorthand. It doesn't really do much to help you, as a writer. It doesn't help you improve- you're relying on exacting definitions made by other people to get everything across! What about your own words? It can also end up shuttering your skills, because when you start thinking in tropes, it's very difficult to break out of the habit because it's so very easy to categorize everything and everyone, rather than letting your characters grow and develop into being like actual people.
You don't need to be using those to tell us what a character is like- there are better ways. I, personally, would advocate against not doing it at all, but that's a personal opinion.
The very final one is comparatively very minor, and is a personal view: Having a character be from a rather new canon doesn't really work out, to me, for a few reasons.
One is that people are still working and playing through the game, and most still haven't have had the chance to even play it yet- much less afford it! It's a bit rude to those who haven't had the chance because it's still a very new game, and having characters- much less ones supposed to be PCs- from it increases the chance of spoilers for people who still intend to pick it up.
Two is that fanon and fandom takes time to develop, and a few months really isn't enough to tell you what direction- or even if there will be staying power with certain ideas- the fandom will go in.