Subject: Maybe you should wait a bit.
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Posted on: 2012-01-29 21:33:00 UTC
Until it is longer.
What bothers me with many Harry Potter fanfics is that they can't get the years right. From the fic it sounds like sixth year, and it's 2012. Also, as you mentioned, why would Sakura and Tomoyo even end up at Dursleys'? The Dursleys hate magic.
While looking for a good Card Captor Sakura crossover to read I stumbled upon this thing:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7746443/1/HarryPotterAndTheElemental_Master
A crossover with Harry Potter. Not unusual (everything is crossed over multiple times with HP) and not excessively bad, but it seems to have a great fun potential (In fact, just by reading it I half-plotted out a mission, as there were some situations that just begged for Agents commenting on it). And if there is a problem with my spinoff, is exactly the lack of truly humorous situations.
The main "charges" for now (as only two chapters have been written) are unexplained situations (just how the hell did Sakura and Tomoyo end up guests at Harry's house? And from when Tomoyo has magic?) and the fact that the grammar still needs a lot of work even if this story seems to have a beta
I am indeed waiting for more chapters, two wouldn't be enough even for a fast MST.
I just glanced at the length, but it looks about the same as "Cosmic Love." The first paragraph alone in that one gave us a page's worth of material, and it wasn't a long paragraph. As with many things, it's not the size that counts, but how you use it. *g*
~Neshomeh
Well, I certainly see what you mean about the charges. I don't know Card Captor Sakura all that well.
As of now, though, I don't think it's of sufficient length to be sporked. It looks like it has problems, but at present not enough of them to justify a sporking. This is one reason I tend to wait a bit for fics I want to make missions out of: I want to be sure that I get to feature the juiciest charge material possible.
So for that reason, I second EF's motion that you wait just a little bit. You never know, the worst charges might be just around the corner in an update you haven't seen yet.
Until it is longer.
What bothers me with many Harry Potter fanfics is that they can't get the years right. From the fic it sounds like sixth year, and it's 2012. Also, as you mentioned, why would Sakura and Tomoyo even end up at Dursleys'? The Dursleys hate magic.