Well, as pointed out below, it's recommended that you hang around for a while before you apply for permission. That said, there are a few other issues with your application.

Here at the PPC, our entire mission is to promote goodfic-- one of the most important things that separates goodfic from badfic is the spelling and grammar-- syntax in general, really. So, to put it bluntly, it would really help your chances if you proofread your posts on the Board for spelling and grammar before posting them. I is generally capitalized (unless you have an e. e. cummings style explanation, in which case I really, really look forward to your eventual spinoff, quite seriously) and so on.

Concerning your agents, it's hard to say anything about them, because the profiles, honestly, don't say much about their personality, which is the important bit. (Also, bit of a nitpick-- 'humanish' is generally referred to as 'humanoid,' unless you've an actual species called humanish, in which case I stand corrected.) The thing that makes your spin-off worth reading isn't the age of your agents, or their guns-- it's their character. Their personality-- what makes them tick? How do they view the world, each other, the PPC? Do they regret leaving their home continuum, or look back on it with disdain? All of that-- how they tell their stories, how they live their lives... that's what we're reading for. Think about your agents-- imagine them in scenarios, meeting each other for the first time, reacting to their first Sues, and so on-- that's the important part.

Your writing sample... um. To put it bluntly, you really need a *beta. You've got to work on your dialogue-- for example,

"Yoyo have you even looked at this tag?" Beat questioned "This isn't some try-hard trying to pump himself up. This is quality work and besides only a rudie could reach half the places he's tagged"

should be punctuated:

"Yoyo, have you even looked at this tag?" Beat asked. "This isn't some try-hard trying to pump himself up. This is quality work, and besides, only a rudie could reach half the places he's tagged."

Never end a quote with just a quotation mark-- you want either the full stop or question mark at the end of a sentence, in which case the next words after the quotation mark should be a new sentence. (For example: "They all disappeared." She looked away. rather than "They all disappeared" she looked away.) You can also use a comma, but in that case you need to be careful that you are not starting a new sentence. (For example: "They all disappeared," she said, looking away. instead of "They all disappeared," She said and looked away.)

You've got quite a few comma errors, and you should have some sort of segue between scenes. You've got the first scene, with the two main characters(?) viewing a tag, and the teenager watching-- then you've got the group talking, and then the girl and the villain(?). There's no break between them, so it's a bit confusing to sort out on first read-through.

My recommendation is to go through and read the Original Series, and as many of the spin-offs as you can-- try and get a feel for the style you want, so you know what you're applying for. And be sure to proofread your stuff before it goes up-- a lot of times, you can fix those comma errors just by reading a sentence out loud and feeling where the pauses should be.

This is by no means a permanent deny; you've got plenty of time, and it's absolutely recommended that you hang around and try again when you've got to know the community a little better, and have a feel for what you want to do, more. Hope to see you around!

--VM

*I can't really offer to beta it right now, my life has just taken a turn for the crazy, but if you catch my on the IRC, I'll pm you and discuss things more in-depth-- grammar issues, anyway. I don't know that canon too well.

We usually wait a month to get to know new PPCers before Permission is given. As such, you'll be asked to wait for that long until you're able to repost a Permission request. On that subject, I've found a few problems with the request that probably should be rectified.

1) Inconsistent capitalization, especially when using the word 'I'. It may be that you were just typing rapidly, but hitting either of the 'shift' keys isn't all that hard, even when typing quickly.

2) There's not that much information about your agents here. What roles did they play in their original story? How did Percy get that handgun? What are their personalities like? Why did they have to beg the agent to recruit them? Usually, if an agent comes across willing and able recruits, they shove them through a portal to the Daisy's office ASAP. Also, how did they know the agent was an ally? Just because the agent was in a badfic doesn't mean that they can be trusted.

3) Your writing sample is good, but it seems rushed. Also, there are several instances where you've omitted punctuation marks when closing speech tags.

I hope this helps some!

-Pretzel

As a general rule, you should wait at least one month so we can get to know you better. Quote the Wiki:

Q. When should I ask for permission?

A. Whenever you feel comfortable and confident asking. The sole caveat is that the Permission Givers are not likely to grant permission to someone they just met or don't recognize, so it helps if you've been around long enough to have a visible presence in the community, but there's no magical time period.

You have to be an active member for at least a month before requesting permission.