Subject: I especially like the Carver.
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Posted on: 2011-10-14 08:30:00 UTC
It's different and interesting to see an agent who's a bit more antagonistic than usual. Lake seems like fun, too.
Subject: I especially like the Carver.
Author:
Posted on: 2011-10-14 08:30:00 UTC
It's different and interesting to see an agent who's a bit more antagonistic than usual. Lake seems like fun, too.
OK, so I finally finished my new interlude, which introduces my new agent pair. I really, really hope it's good, 'cause I've been worried for ages that I screwed it up. On that note, this is also to say that I probably won't be around much until November, due to some rather terrible exams. I will, however, write the Halloween Co-Write intro and ghost story.
Warning: the interlude contains swearing and self-harming. I have no idea what the equivalent ff.net rating would be, but I'd rate it about MA 15+ by the Australian ratings (I figured that any rating would be better than none.)
Link is here: http://astra-aurora.livejournal.com/23306.html
It's different and interesting to see an agent who's a bit more antagonistic than usual. Lake seems like fun, too.
I look forward to learning more about Fix and The Carver. It looks like they each have 'issues' that will play well of each other in future stories.
One nitpick: Technically an organism is only a parasite if it benefits at the expense of the host, which doesn't seem like the case here. (Not really enough information to be certain) I believe the more correct term would by "symbiont" or "symbiotic organism."
I really liked it. It had good pacing and the scenes flowed nicely from one to another.
I was confused when Fix mentions his instincts from the years he spent in gangs, since I thought he didn't remember them. Does he still have the instincts and then someone has told him where they are from, or how does that work?
I was impressed with the conversation between Fix and the Marquis. It is rare to see a piece that really deals with how it feels for someone to learn that they are nothing more than a half-baked character from a discarded story, and your take on it was really touching.
And the whole 'Wait, I get paid? And get food?' made me smile. I know one of my agents, Mittens, had exactly the same reaction.
I found Carver genuinely creepy, especially when she started throwing blood around, because then it seemed like she knew Fix' weakness and was using it against him. I was relived when Fix called her on it and told her that it wasn't working and that he wasn't going anywhere. I imagine that they'll grow on each other.
About the instincts thing- yeah, I phrased that badly. What I meant was that he still has the instincts, I just really phrased that badly. *goes to edit*.
Fix and the Carver probably will grow on each other eventually. It'll take time, but she'll lay off the creepy now that they're stuck together. She didn't actually know his weakness, she just assumed that he'd either be disconcerted enough to want a transfer, or, if he was some kind of blood-consuming species, he'd be responsible enough to get a transfer rather than risk potentially killing a partner.
Thanks for the feedback, I'm really relieved to see that at least one person thinks I did it right. *smiles*
You're welcome. And good luck with the exams!
Oh, thanks! *hugs*