Not granted

Permission Request by desdendelle on 2011-10-13 04:19:00 UTC Reply

A sample of my writing. It's just desdendelle's post (yes, I use the same handle), not anything else on that page.

Fandoms:
Lord of the Rings
The Culture
The Bartimaeus Trilogy
Forgotten Realms
Sabriel
Star Wars (some of it, anyway)
Ratchet and Clank
Doctor Who
Artemis Fowl
Some of RA Heinlein's books

Name: Caliban (real name unknown)
Age: 20
Home Continuum: Real Life
Partner: Agent Ariel
Object of Lust: Tea
Department: Department of Floaters
Weapons: as appropriate in the setting, but usually either a pistol or a longsword

Agent Caliban asked to be named thusly, after a character in one of Shakespeare's plays, when he was recruited to the PPC. He led a rather normal life before, his many weird quirks notwithstanding. His hobbies include reading, composing poetry, shooting pistols, and practicing fencing. He is a quiet person, with a dry sense of humour and a sarcastic and jaded view of the world. He is, of course, rather crazy, even if it does not show most of the time. He is short and thin, with a long, angular face. His small goatee and brown hair are usually kept short. He usually wears black cargo pants, a green Polo shirt, black gloves, brown hiking shoes, and a brown longcoat.

Name: Ariel
Age: 18
Home Continuum: Real Life
Partner: Agent Caliban
Object of Lust: Her partner
Department: Department of Floaters
Weapons: various poisonous substances.

As did her partner, she requested to be names after a character of Shakespeare's when she was recruited; before that, she led a normal, if troubled, life: while she was (and is) unshakably cheery, she was bullied for quite a bit of time because of her weird interests, which included poisons and My Little Pony. Of course, that made her all the more interested in poisons... Anyway, she is tall, lean and clumsy (except when she is dealing with her poisons, where clumsiness means an early death), with shoulder-length brown hair and a face that while not beautiful, is quite cute when she smiles (most of the time). She usually wears a green T-shirt, blue pants and snickers. Personality-wise, she is a typical Genki Girl – loud and hyperactive. Of course, she is crazy, but it doesn't show behind all of that Genkiness and goodwill.

Badfic to Spork.

Here goes nothing...

Not granted by Phobos on 2011-10-13 05:42:00 UTC Reply

Here's why. You just got here. I know that you have been binging on PPC related things in the week since you got here, but you have to take it slow. Give us time to get to know you. We aren't going anywhere.

Now, to give some feedback on the substance of the request...

The agents look good, though it seems quite coincidental that both chose Shakespearean character names for themselves.

I like your choice of a first mission. Too many people have agents in Floaters and then do nothing with them except Mary Sue missions. So, I think your choice of a crossover is a good one.

As for your writing sample, I would like to see you write something that is entirely yours for the next time you ask for permission. Part of the reason for the writing sample is to see if you can create a scene. So flex your writing muscles.

-Phobos, where permission requests go to die

Re: Not granted by desdendelle on 2011-10-15 19:09:00 UTC Reply

Ah, I see. OK. I started writing that mission anyway, since I was bedridden and had nothing to do. So I'll use it when the time will come to ask for permission again.
PS: Yes, it is quite coincidental that they both chose Shakespearean names (from The Tempest, to be exact); I thought that it was suitably... humorous.