Subject: Interesting!
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Posted on: 2011-10-11 15:28:00 UTC

Hmm, my guys are slated to pick up a repaired CAD in the future, though I intend to make them suffer with bad-haiku!CAD for at least one mission first. Nume has the seniority to get a new model . . . though it's Ilraen they actually like around DoSAT. Hmm indeed.

I always thought the devices were black, personally. Wouldn't any bright colors show up too easily? Also, a spaghetti box seems an unusual shape—the ones I'm familiar with, at least, are long and narrow, not very practical. I guess I figured they fit easily into one hand, like a remote control, only boxier. Or maybe like a tricorder, which has a similar function (scan and provide readout).

Also, caught a mistake, bolded here: "'This is Technician Second Class Narcolepsy, senior member of the Testing and Application Division of the Department of Sufficiently Enhanced Technology.'" Should be "Advanced," of course.

I also read the first story, and I'll be interested to see how the field testing goes for that one. It can't go well immediately, that wouldn't be any fun. *g*

Snapshot seems to be adjusting well. I love that she has more formal education than the others. ^_^

The level of detail in both stories is really excellent. You sound like you know what you're talking about, and I can "see" everything, even if I don't have the technical know-how as a point of reference (or necessarily agree with said descriptions). I may have missed reading other stories with Narcolepsy in them before, but I got a really good idea of how he's constructed in these, with his eyes adjusting, and "brain" winding up, and all that. Really cool. Good work!

~Neshomeh

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