Subject: Nice.
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Posted on: 2011-09-28 02:48:00 UTC
Your agents are interesting-- I particularly like the idea that one might develop some kind of complex around Sues being 'inferior constructs' after some time. Your writing sample is very good - I don't know the canons, but your spelling, grammar, and style pass with flying colors. I'd assume with a PPC spin-off you'd be writing with more humor, but other than that it looks good.
Permission granted!
Well, I'm going to have a shot at Permission. Any feedback will be appreciated. Thanks.
Name: Chris Hammond
Age: 21
Sex: Male
Appearance: A Caucasian human about 181cm in height, with dirty blonde-hair and short-sighted blue eyes (hence he wears a pair of glasses). Notable features include the lack of a left foot big toe and unusual birth scarring on his left arm and chest. Usually wears a light blue T-shirt, faded denim jeans and white socks and sneakers, though he does change into a business suit for more formal occasions
Home Continuum: World One (Real World)
Department: Department of Floaters
Partner: Agent Lothar Roth (trainer)
Fandoms: Mass Effect series, Dragon Age series, Warhammer 40,000, Star Wars-verse, Doctor Who, Clancy-verse and Tolkien-verse (Original and Movie-verse – general knowledge (so don't ask him to speak in Rohirric)). Is willing to explore other verses and genres with another agent.
Lust Objects: Liara T'Soni (Mass Effect series) and Merril (Dragon Age II) are the most notable.
Response Center: None ... yet.
Weapons: 6.5X52 mm Carcano bolt-action carbine, whatever melee weapon he could pick up or improvise with (though he is not a proficient melee fighter). Has extensive knowledge about equipment from Warhammer 40,000 canon.
Personality: As a new recruit, despite Chris' sociability and his eagerness to become involved within the PPC, his current next to nil experience within the organisation is sorely telling.
While he does have a fairly broad appeal and is quite learned in the few fandoms he knows, he is inexperienced within the anime/magna genre due to lack of interest and he steers clear of works like “Harry Potter” and “Twilight” where he can.
He is also noted to be rather vehement against canon/character muddling, which can cause him to act irrationally. Heaven forbid if a canon he enjoys is messed up badly or one of his Lust-Objects is mistreated.
Lastly, he holds trollfics in contempt, branding them as a waste of time and energy.
History: An Australian university student, Chris encountered fanfiction relatively late in his teenage life, however, he became instantly enamoured in those works that pulled themselves off well and condescending at the ways that some did not. However, real life called and, for a time, he was parted from the Words World.
That is, until he learned of an organisation known as the PPC from some general research on TV Tropes. Curious, he searched for further information, yet to his shock, he was suddenly transported to PPC HQ (means unknown, but Chris has since speculated it to be a misfiring portal). With no way back (and intrigued by the place), he volunteered for the PPC, intending to see fiction in a way he had never seen before.
For the time being, he has been assigned to Agent L. Roth for training.
AGENT 02 (TEMPORARY)
Name: Lothar Roth
Age: 24
Sex: Male
Appearance: A human from Helghan. Notable albino complexion, bald and of average height and musculature. Usually wears a battered Helghast Army uniform and set of armour (though he can change into civilian clothing or an alternate outfit if necessary). Due to the detrimental effects of Helghan's environment, he is forced to wear their iconic respirator and set of goggles of his people when not in a native environment, though he doesn't know that Helghast can breath in a normal atmosphere (given time).
Home Continuum: Killzone
Department: Department of Floaters
Partner: Chris Hammond (training)
Fandoms: Multiple popular video games, including, (but not limited to) Call of Duty, Medal of Honour, Mass Effect, Half-Life and the Rainbow Six series. Is looking to dabble in Tolkien or other mediums to expand his experience.
Lust Objects: None known.
Response Center: [Pending]
Weapons: Proficient in modern firearms and CQC. Usually uses a StA52 assault rifle and combat knife (unless the continuum being explored prohibits the use of similar weapons).
Personality: In general social interaction, he can be normal by human standards. He is interested in drama and has taken a liking to Shakespeare and some actors who had performed works based on the plays (such as Kenneth Branagh) – this could account for his manner of speaking: quipped, blunt and with a bit of subdued flair.
On the other hand, his time within the PPC have already begun to take a toll. He has become bitter and often rams home that Mary Sues/Marty Stus and their ilk are merely the constructs of amateurs and, as such, are inferior. This attitude and the resulting enraged impulses (possibly a side-effect of his indoctrination in the Helghan military) has caused friction between him, more level-headed agents and higher-ups.
History: A native of the planet Helghan (one of several colonised planets orbiting Alpha Centauri) and having been brought up in harsh conditions, Loth was recruited into the Helghan Army when he was of appropriate age and trained. About two years after his induction, he participated in the invasion of Vekta, where he was reported as MIA after a fire-fight broke out aboard an orbiting defence platform between the Helghast (who had seized the station) and a four man ISA “commando team”.
In reality, within the confusion, he had been extracted by a then-unknown representative for the PPC who had been looking to recruit. Faced with the choice of either facing certain death or going along with a stranger into the unknown, Loth accepted an offer and eventually joined the PPC.
Originally assigned to the Department of Mary Sues, things for Loth began to go downhill over the course of two years. The harsh doctrines that had been ingrained in him within the Helghan Army, despite his best efforts and social attempts, had remained. After several reports of brutal (by PPC standards) executions, Upstairs approached him with an ultimatum: induct new recruits into the basics of PPC operations and reform his conduct or he will be forcefully “retired”. Grudgingly, this was accepted and his first charge is due to arrive within a matter of days...
Writing Sample: My only fanfiction to date - not great, but should serve as an example of my capabilities: (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6492167/1/TipoftheSpearEdgeoftheBladeRedux)
Chosen Badfic: I have decided to stick with a fic I had analysed in detail earlier, “Commissar Cain in deep” (http://games.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600086800 ). WARNING: N.S.F.W.
Why? Well, to quote the PPC Wiki's summary:
“... [it's] largely comprised of a laundry list of sex acts. Pointless, plotless porn that would be hilarious if it wasn't so badly written. Contains none of the humor or character of the original novels.”
for:
- gaining my interest for your Agents
- being generally awesome
- and earning your Permission!
I'm not a Permission giver, but I know Vixen has given yours so... (pops open bleepka bottle and confetti spurts out) Cheers! :D
Your agents are interesting-- I particularly like the idea that one might develop some kind of complex around Sues being 'inferior constructs' after some time. Your writing sample is very good - I don't know the canons, but your spelling, grammar, and style pass with flying colors. I'd assume with a PPC spin-off you'd be writing with more humor, but other than that it looks good.
Permission granted!
I'd like to sumbit an agent too! Though don't expect that I'm going to write stories about him since my writing skills are subpar.
Agent Sinclair
Age: 17
Sex: Male
Species: Anthropomorphic sheep (prefers the term sheep-boy)
Appearance: Sinclair is a Norfolk Horn sheep with brown eyes and black skin. This gives him the appearance of a bipedal sheep with hands and a human-like face while still retaining the hooves of his sheep half. His arms, head, and neck are the only parts of him that are covered in wool. His horns curl around into a lateral spiral.
Home continuum: World One and a half (was abandoned halfway into creation)
Department: Department of Floaters
Partner: Currently pending
Fandoms: Starfox, My Little Pony, Animaniacs, Cats Don’t Dance, Sailor Moon, Looney Tunes, and Digimon
Lust Objects: Cheetara (Thundercats 2011), Peter Cullen’s voice, and Renamon
Weapons: Sinclair has little to no understanding on how to fight. As such, he is usually on the sidelines writing charges down and will only use long ranged weapons such as guns and spears. Since he is a sheep and thus is covered in wool, he can use it to generate massive amounts of static electricity; however this only works if he has enough wool and can get close enough to a Sue to zap them.
Backstory: Agent Sinclair was initially the idea for a character for a furry webcomic right before his creator realized that making a dozen more unique characters like him would take too long, so he was abandoned alongside the comic halfway into creation. This left him alone in World One and a half before he was found and taken in. With nothing better to do, he decided to train to become an Agent, determined to make the life for himself that his creator couldn’t. Sinclair is just a nickname he made up during his time training.
Personality: Since he was abandoned halfway in to creation, only half of his personality actually exists, so he is currently making up the other half as he goes. His existing personality consists of recklessness, optimism, and a dislike of J-Pop. He has a bad habit of getting angry during a mission, and then revert to his cheerful self shortly afterwards in a matter of seconds.
It's generally considered rude to tag on to someone's permission request with agents or a permission request of your own. While we do try to encourage the posting of other badfic in previously created badfic threads, that's not the case for permission threads.
Beyond that, agents are for writing with, not just making up or recruiting (be it just because, or to have that many.)
Additionally, you haven't been around for very long, nor have you posted very much, which makes this premature, to say the least.
... ROTHY's Agent was pretty creative. I wouldn't mind reading Sinclair's missons if ROTHY will ever get to write them. I'd say her attempt at a permission request is like a good rough draft.
However, there is a time and place for everything, and here in this thread was not it, in terms of posting their agent.