Subject: A good start!
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Posted on: 2011-09-18 12:06:00 UTC
Your story was a bit heavy on the exposition at first, but that's typical of first-time missions. Your agents definitely have a lot of potential, especially for some quality bantering. I'm definitely looking forward to whatever you have planned next for these two.
It's taken me seven months, but my first mission is finally ready to be released. This mission takes place in the world of Fahrenheit 451. It's 31,000 words and fifteen pages. Awesome.
Mission:
http://doctorlit.dreamwidth.org/2525.html
Original fic by Pele the Goddess:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5169779/1/Myownmatch
Rescues:
Miss MacKinnon (formerly Mistress Mujhort) will be taking up a job in the Daycare.
Dicionarys (yes, that's spelled correctly) will be printed in bulk and available to any agents who desire to use them.
Your story was a bit heavy on the exposition at first, but that's typical of first-time missions. Your agents definitely have a lot of potential, especially for some quality bantering. I'm definitely looking forward to whatever you have planned next for these two.
Plans are already in the works for the next couple of missions...
I liked how you described the aftermath of the OCs after the Mary Sue was killed! Great work and please write more soon!
But seriously, who would dare defile a Ray Bradbury masterpiece like Farenheit 451?!
...Sorry, it just that it's one of my favorite novels, and I don't like to see my favorites messed with...
Fortunately, it's the only badfic I've managed to find for Fahrenheit . . . of course, that might change if the new movie ever gets out of development hell. 0_0
Ever seen the old movie version? It's not bad, but the special effects are, well... lacking at times. (And one part in particular is... well... laughable at best.)
My favorite part though is when one of the Book People introduces himself as "The Martian Chronicles by Ray Bradbury", a nice nod to the original author.
Imagine how much worse the effects would have been if they had tried to include the Mechanical Hound?