Subject: It's perfect, thanks!
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Posted on: 2011-08-24 02:59:00 UTC
Christ, I knew there was something I'd forgotten (this mission, as you've probably guessed, drove me up the wall.) Thanks for taking care of that- it's right on the nose.
Well, I've pulled the hat trick, but it turns out that the hat in question is a mortarboard- sure, it's worth having, but that doesn't mean you'll maintain a shred of dignity if you wear it in public.
This is the first mission I've done that I'm really dissatisfied with. The comedy's not up to par, the characters are nastier than usual, and it just will. Not. END. I'll probably overhaul this at some point, but for now, I just want it off my plate.
Part 1: http://gaikokujinguy.livejournal.com/2809.html
Part 2: http://gaikokujinguy.livejournal.com/2817.html
Part 3: http://gaikokujinguy.livejournal.com/3087.html
Part 4: http://gaikokujinguy.livejournal.com/3521.html
Part 5: http://gaikokujinguy.livejournal.com/3608.html
Lewt:
Nine (9) Undercovers (one deceased)
Look, you might think the comedy wasn't good and the characters were nasty, but I really liked this mission. You did a really good job.
I also liked the exorcism. I added a paragraph to the Sue-wraith page on the Wiki to report your agents' discovery of the new wraith type. Why in the world didn't we have this already?--I mean, there are SO many fics where characters, for no good reason, turn evil and start killing things. Especially for really flimsy reasons like "I suddenly decided I liked Divination and some random old guy told me I had to become a Death Eater"... yeah.
You might wanna check the entry to make sure it's what you intended.
http://ppc.wikia.com/wiki/Sue-wraith
Christ, I knew there was something I'd forgotten (this mission, as you've probably guessed, drove me up the wall.) Thanks for taking care of that- it's right on the nose.
this has been my favorite wraith battle. Ever. Of all time. Reading through the whole mission was so worth it just to get to that.
I just want to point out one thing: "The few Death Eaters that were there started leaving. Until Draco Malfoy asked, giving a loud hiccup as the paragraph ended on a comma.
'What if muggles are there, master?'"
The "giving a loud hiccup as the paragraph ended on a comma" part is in bold as though it were part of the badfic quote. (Unless the badfic was actually mentioning paragraphs and commas? 'Cause that would be weird.)
Ach; I lost most of my formatting in the upload, so I messed that up when I was redoing it. Fix'd now.
And hey, who's to say that things can't get worse between agents from here?
But yeah, that was a bad fanfic. I mean, how incidentally idiotic could the plot get? That was a lot of stupid to cram into one fic. Fortunately, though, I've seen worse. MUCH worse, and shockingly it wasn't even from the HP continuum.
Still, entertaining mission, even if you're not happy with it.
(Incidentally, I thought about a really great revenge plan Kirill could concoct for when we do the co-sporking of that Narnia fic when we get to that which would then backfire on Kirill in a really, really crazy way. I'll tell you more in chat if you're on tonight.)